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Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

0 posted 2001-05-26 04:05 PM

From distant drums of waves that beat so strong
I hear a voice that plays a melody
it's nightingale and radiance in song
and covers me in love so tenderly
It's sharing lost between the bittersweet
when coupled to another's hand you hold
and childhood pain is honored and complete
and warmth returns to life from bitter cold
Would thee not build a bridge for us to cross?
Through brokenness can love and spirits heal?
I've surveyed the terrain from hearts once lost
no bridges left, so please don't be afraid
for you can come to me, deny the cost
and I will answer all the prayers you've prayed
we'll find a river swept from richer land
if you will only give me, dear, your hand.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 05-26-2001).]

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

1 posted 2001-05-27 12:47 PM

Kathleen: This is really beautiful!

Betty Lou Hebert

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2001-05-28 05:34 PM

You've become addicted to sonnets, haven't you, Kathleen....hehehe.....they are addicting, aren't they? This is fabulous! I would just make one suggestion where the meter seemed a bit off:

I've surveyed the terrain from hearts once lost

I think it flows better like this:

I have surveyed terrain from hearts once lost

Again, very well done, Kathleen! Keep 'em coming! I'm loving it!!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

3 posted 2001-05-28 05:46 PM

Betty: thank you!

Denise: You're right about that line! Thankyou!

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2001-05-28 05:58 PM

Very nice indeed Kathleen

Well Done

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

5 posted 2001-05-28 10:25 PM

This is lovely Joyce

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-05-29 12:06 PM

This one is very deep. Well written and great thoughts here. You have an amazing talent for these!

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

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