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PKreturns
Member

since 2003-07-21

Posts 362
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2004-07-12 04:52 PM

All the world's a blur and my vision dims
The wind howls in haunting anger and fear
As we are cast about like dice on a whim
The present is slipping, into the future we sail
Retrospective actions are too late, they fail
And my hands clench nothing, short of their goal
Eyes mist through their dryness and are veiled
Even with sight we cannot see with eyes of coal
In different dimensions, different degrees
We all try to help ourselves see
But what we learn from memory;
This thing can never be

I am taxed by weariness from the labor
Of trying to do somehow more than asked
But it is this struggle, this very labor
That gives me life and some sort of task
Ah, but the horizon lies ever just ahead
And the landscape shifts with slightest inclination
So that this icon is something else instead
Feeding from the wickedness of the population
3D sight surrounds the light
Of hope to survive, maybe, just might
We ascend the impossible height,
Only to descend into endless night...

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-07-12 06:30 PM

Jer, I'm keeping this one

, though it has an ominous feel, it's a good read.

PatAngel
Member

since 2004-04-05

Posts 451
California

2 posted 2004-07-12 09:40 PM

Dear PK~

"But it is this struggle, this very labor
that gives me life and some sort of task".

Beautifully written! I love it.

Patricia

'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go.
For dreams are the tiny seeds from which tomorrow grows.'

peaceful_dreamer
Member

since 2003-04-25

Posts 159
SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW

3 posted 2004-07-13 01:51 AM

Wow. I'm really impressed. The whole thing was great, but I think the end was the best part. Well done!
-Peaceful

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-07-13 04:36 AM

yes! love the ending!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2004-07-13 11:20 AM

I am taxed by weariness from the labor
Of trying to do somehow more than asked
But it is this struggle, this very labor
That gives me life and some sort of task
Ah, but the horizon lies ever just ahead
And the landscape shifts with slightest inclination

In the beginning, you had me scratching my head...wondering why you would allow such qestions to grow on you so, but alas, you fooled me...or should I say, my assumptions fooled myself, cause in the end, you had me jumping for joy and high fiving ya

Excellent!

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

6 posted 2004-07-13 04:15 PM

bold and with great imagery and imagination. A truly great write.
Hugs from June x

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