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PKreturns
Member

since 2003-07-21

Posts 362
New Orleans, LA

0 posted 2004-07-12 08:42 AM

As she asked me please
I fell to my knees
A forgotten man
I have traveled the seas
Of false securities
Reaching out my hand
To break these chains
That have still remained
They always do
But here comes the pain
With the falling rain
It’s nothing new
Now, there’s a new wind blowing
The haze is clearing
A new revelation
Like a fire showing
The flames I’m fearing,
That old temptation
And for a moment all is still
Except for my wavering will
An absence of sound
I dare not leave until
Of her I get my fill
And sink softly to the ground
Waiting for the sun to rise
And shed light on my tired eyes
To begin once again
The journey I so despise
Her name whispers around me
As it flies
Upon the Eastern wind

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

1 posted 2004-07-12 04:37 PM

Very powerful emotions here. I like this one very much and the rhythm and pace of your poem is exceptional. well done a good write.
Hugs June x

PKreturns
Member

since 2003-07-21

Posts 362
New Orleans, LA

2 posted 2004-07-12 04:40 PM

Thank you very much June.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2004-07-12 06:32 PM

"The journey I so despise"
the journey
is life itself

PatAngel
Member

since 2004-04-05

Posts 451
California

4 posted 2004-07-12 09:36 PM

This is terrific! I liked this very much.

Patricia

'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go.
For dreams are the tiny seeds from which tomorrow grows.'

peaceful_dreamer
Member

since 2003-04-25

Posts 159
SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW

5 posted 2004-07-13 01:58 AM

I enjoyed reading this. You did a nice job. I don't get the title though...
-Peaceful

"I'm just me, trapped in a body."

-peaceful_dreamer

PKreturns
Member

since 2003-07-21

Posts 362
New Orleans, LA

6 posted 2004-07-13 08:47 AM

Thank you all. Midnite - the journey i sometimes do despise.

Peaceful - The title is Latin for eastern wind. I was taking Latin in college at the time and thought it sounded cool *S*.

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