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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Winter blue sun breaks low across clouds gathered like a gauze scarf under where you, blue jean clad smiling gift, rock in gold and womanhood. Snow lies about the season, lies about the chill in your long, thin hands rubbing a yellow gold ring where lies about the world's spin, falling off your lips. These cold white chattering bones, covered by lips and longings too deep too sensually licked over the slippery feel of sliding me into you, on the high slope. What you gave as your sideways smile, coyly you kiss as your perfumed, dark hand takes the matter of a Christmas list, bending my will as the North wind whispers icily. Ours is a scribbled list of firsts. Every breath you blow into my mouth, another day gives way to a new light shining on your teeth while you dream with hands clutching my chest. We said goodnight, staring at the untouchable lips in the spying light of a moon sobbing for your children calling us through our parting kiss. I woke smelling your skin and the indigo night in your long black hair. Your lips part to show the gold surrounding your teeth where my tongue probes your blue winter. Sparticus |
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cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
Sparticus this is beautiful. Theimages take me to your snowy clime. Maggie |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very very beautiful! Love you imagery...excellent. Hugs~ [This message has been edited by Enchantress (12-09-2003 06:42 PM).] |
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Laicie Junior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 37Australia |
Me too! The way you express this with the images...it's as if I'm right there in the poem itself. Beautiful read!  Those who love deeply Never grow old; |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you guys, so much...I so enjoy this group. Sparticus Even with insects- |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
   (big hugggsssssss) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautifully written, sweet friend, God Bless You and may this holiday season bring you much love and warmth, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jesse, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "You'll find something that's enough to keep you |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Quite a pleasing use of metaphor in both the pieces you've posted, Sparticus. Although I didn't comment on the other, I really enjoyed the innovation and imagery in both. CB 8) |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you, MA and C. I am glad you enjoyed them. Sparticus Even with insects- |
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jaicie114 Senior Member
since 2003-09-27
Posts 750On the edge of forever |
Sparticus... Amazing as always...you are a master! Thank you for sharing. Love and Light...jc This I know as Truth...we are all Beings of Light. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sooooooooooo thoughtfully beautiful~ 'I woke smelling your skin and the indigo night in your long black hair.' AND just how gorgeous is this ??? VERY ! *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Shereen Member
since 2004-01-05
Posts 57Michigan, USA |
This is intriguing and beautiful - like the woman in contrast to winter. I've always thought of winter as a woman - I suppose she'd be the original "Ice Princess"? Nice one. Shereen. |
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Sparticus Member
since 2003-11-15
Posts 245 |
Thank you JC, Marge and Sheenan...I am glad you enjoyed this...She is my original Ice Queen...2004 will be exciting...Happy New Year to the PiP! Jesse |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a fine piece! |
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