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junemac
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0 posted 2003-11-08 05:02 AM



Stirred into consciousness
Even before she opens her eyes
By a pungent sweet aroma
She curls up feotally
Hugging her knees
Through waves of nausea

Morning light somehow penetrates
filtering through pores in her eyelids
Blinding her with a crimson screen
Assaulting her awake with shattering pain

She begins to move, to feel greater agony
She needs to feel pain to believe she is alive
Gingerly she begins to open her eyes
Struggling to separate lashes, welded with crust
Each tiny movement painfully admits light
Puncturing her brain with exquisite agony

She rocks her body away from her pillow
Dragging damp strands of hair with her
Peeling herself away from storm torn sheets
One shoe drops to the floor
Causing the first shock of mental pain
She grasps for memory that eludes her

Bent vulnerably she tiptoes away
Focus has shifted to her tongue
Parched as if left out to dry
Water draws her into a small room
Where snow bright walls punch her again
Dizzying her into groping blindness

She stoops to precious water supply
And stops ..........
Where is her reflection ?
In her mirror stands a stranger
A monster too fearful to face
Did she die after all ?
If so, When did death visit her?


She crumbles to the floor
No longer capeable of living
Ice cold tile embraces her
She snuggles closer to the cold
Like a child to maternal breast

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paraboxer
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1 posted 2003-11-08 06:54 AM


As usual, excellent. I particularly loved the effect of capturing the dispair and pain of a morning after. Keep on writing.
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2 posted 2003-11-08 11:50 AM


This was so real and chilling.  A truly wonderful job.  Love, Joyce
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3 posted 2003-11-08 12:43 PM




(big hugggssssssss) This is so very sad but so well-written, dearest friend, I have never drinked and never will as I don't want to risk having these same kind of awake hallucinations! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet June, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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4 posted 2003-11-08 03:02 PM


junemac:  This has impact, that's for sure!
I can't imagine waking up in such condition, but you have certainly painted a graphic picture!

Betty Lou Hebert

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5 posted 2003-11-08 11:04 PM


So sad....  hugs...
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6 posted 2003-11-09 02:00 AM


call me crazy but I love the sadness
gringakiwi
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7 posted 2003-11-09 08:36 AM


I often feel like this on a sunday morning. Although it is terrible, I can see sense in it.
Well written Junemac!
love Connie.

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