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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk 
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Stirred into consciousness Even before she opens her eyes By a pungent sweet aroma She curls up feotally Hugging her knees Through waves of nausea Morning light somehow penetrates filtering through pores in her eyelids Blinding her with a crimson screen Assaulting her awake with shattering pain She begins to move, to feel greater agony She needs to feel pain to believe she is alive Gingerly she begins to open her eyes Struggling to separate lashes, welded with crust Each tiny movement painfully admits light Puncturing her brain with exquisite agony She rocks her body away from her pillow Dragging damp strands of hair with her Peeling herself away from storm torn sheets One shoe drops to the floor Causing the first shock of mental pain She grasps for memory that eludes her Bent vulnerably she tiptoes away Focus has shifted to her tongue Parched as if left out to dry Water draws her into a small room Where snow bright walls punch her again Dizzying her into groping blindness She stoops to precious water supply And stops .......... Where is her reflection ? In her mirror stands a stranger A monster too fearful to face Did she die after all ? If so, When did death visit her? She crumbles to the floor No longer capeable of living Ice cold tile embraces her She snuggles closer to the cold Like a child to maternal breast |
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paraboxer Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 121Maryland, USA |
As usual, excellent. I particularly loved the effect of capturing the dispair and pain of a morning after. Keep on writing. |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
This was so real and chilling. A truly wonderful job. Love, Joyce |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) This is so very sad but so well-written, dearest friend, I have never drinked and never will as I don't want to risk having these same kind of awake hallucinations! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet June, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
junemac: This has impact, that's for sure! I can't imagine waking up in such condition, but you have certainly painted a graphic picture! Betty Lou Hebert |
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Pearle New Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 7 |
So sad.... hugs... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
call me crazy but I love the sadness |
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gringakiwi Member
since 2003-08-05
Posts 189 |
I often feel like this on a sunday morning. Although it is terrible, I can see sense in it. Well written Junemac! love Connie. |
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