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Sunrise ( Haiku )

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

0 posted 2003-10-26 06:10 PM

this is my first attempt at this form so please be gentle :0)

Sunrise a birth
New beginnings colour the day
Horizen of hope

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2003-10-26 06:35 PM

(smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, may you always rise out of bed when the rooster crows with a smile on your face, yay! (kiss on cheek) This is precious and uplifting, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet June, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

2 posted 2003-10-26 07:26 PM

I don't write haikus but this looks to me like a first class one. Joyce

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

3 posted 2003-10-27 05:13 PM

junemac: Very well done! You must have a flair for this poetry form.

Betty Lou Hebert

Dennis L. White
Senior Member

since 2000-02-17

Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.

4 posted 2003-10-28 11:38 AM

Junemac,

Excellent first haiku, the more you write the more fun they are!

Dennis :^)

Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has passed
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

5 posted 2003-10-28 04:35 PM

First effort?? You could have fooled me. Very well done.

believe in what your heart feels...

pegasus111
Member Elite

since 2000-07-27

Posts 2219
ocala, fl, usa

6 posted 2003-10-28 04:48 PM

I like this. for a first effort it is well done. Although a pure haiku is 5-7-5, this is lovely.

the woods are lovely, dark, and deep, but I have promises to keep, and many miles to go before I sleep...Frost

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

7 posted 2003-10-30 03:04 AM

thank you all. I enjoyed this and may try a few more lol.

hugs june x

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