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aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

0 posted 2003-05-21 06:26 PM

New Moon Phase

When she thinks she is suffering,
She runs around the streets
Only to find places aren't so sweet.
She cries and cries, sitting on the floor,
For she now feels the real tearing.

Tearing of the heart, yearning
Yearning for someone to understand,
All they need is a roof to stand
Under- they don't need people to smile, to them.
For a tearing heart has no desire, but smiling-

Smiling half crying, half washing the face,
They are but helpless captivity,
They are but victim of harsh reality.
She dries her tears, and swears
To live her life in a new moon phase.

(c)May 21, 2003
Eliza Simmons

Side Note: What do u think of this?

Eliza Simmons
~Every girl has a dream within.
~Yesterday insult, today gain.

[This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (05-21-2003 10:24 PM).]

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2003-05-22 10:51 AM

Eliza~
What do I think ?

I think this piece cries from the heart
and then -

'She dries her tears, and swears
To live her life in a new moon phase.'

... rises to the new phasing~

Lovely emote, poetess~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

2 posted 2003-05-22 11:15 AM

Dear Eliza,

I admire the way u made this piece end in a hopeful tone, its lovely *smilEz*

Love
Michelle

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues™

junemac
Senior Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 1005
uk

3 posted 2003-05-22 03:48 PM

oh so heart wrenching...... lovely and i like the ending too.
well done aries.
hugs from june x

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

4 posted 2003-05-22 04:23 PM

Eliza: A very emotional piece but I was glad to see that note of hope for the future, at the end.

Betty Lou Hebert

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-05-25 01:15 AM

I think it is good, I enjoyed this

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