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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind 
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Humongous Fly, fly to paradise Of humongous, unlimited sky. Lovely breeze of summertime, Swaying with me, on my sleek clothes, Dancing with the song of youth, I sing the song of loving you. Oh isn’t my love for you clearly printed. One word from you takes away my consciousness . Don’t you know by heart now, All I want to is to show my hands. I don’t care which lady is on your mind, And that the only communication between us, Is your rare e-mail touch from your precious time. All I care is you allow me To unfold all my heart To your ears anytime. (Oh my love, fly with me.) Fly, fly to paradise Of humongous, unlimited sky. Lovely breeze of summertime, Please come out and play with me. Sway with me, dance with the song of youth. Hold my hands, and I will hold yours, too. ©April 28, 2003 Eliza Simmons Side: hmm...it's a little bit cliche Eliza Simmons |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
But very pretty. Joyce |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Eliza: I really like this! It has the feel of spring and being carefree and enjoying life! Betty Lou Hebert |
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davidmerriman Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 123Dallas, TX |
true, it is a little "cliche", but some lines definately weren't, i'm sure you know that. I would keep working on it, with some editing i'm sure this would be great. |
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