Corner Pub #2 |
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Xeonox![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA ![]() |
Standing there in bare, Waiting for me to join you, The water beating against the wall… As I unwrap myself from a set of clothes, A sense of love stirs me onward, Making my way across the chilled tiles, Seeing nothing but your angelic eyes, No moonlight is brought forth from above, A 60 watt yellow light fills the room, As I look upon your beauty- Your eyes never depart mine, Pressing gently upon those lips, We embrace this wet setting, The beating of water now silenced- My ears ringing the bells of love. I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality. [This message has been edited by Xeonox (10-03-2005 06:55 PM).] |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
I liked this very much. A very modern setting but playing the wonderful ancient art of romance. Lovely words lovely work. Only one word needs changing in the first line ( their should be there ) at least I think I am correct. (if not please accept my apology ) I have read a few of your poems and always enjoy them. You have a talent for fresh and wonderful romantic poetry. Hugs from June xx |
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Xeonox![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
you are correct. Thanks. I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality. |
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bestgirl911 Senior Member
since 2000-10-04
Posts 551Clio, MI , United We Stand |
I agree with June....a modern setting....and very romantic. I enjoyed this alot. Best |
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