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CHILI
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since 2002-09-08

Posts 244

0 posted 2003-01-23 09:37 PM

Darkness descends
upon stubble, ridden
wheat fields

Stars shimmering silver
in a sky of ebony
light the horizon

Lost, misguided souls
wander aimlessly together
yet utterly alone

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2003-01-23 11:07 PM

Very good, Chili!

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2003-01-24 01:22 AM

Speak of being lonely even in a crowd. This last stanza says it all.

CHILI
Member

since 2002-09-08

Posts 244

3 posted 2003-01-24 01:42 AM

Denise, thanks again for taking the time to read and for the nice compliment.

CHILI
Member

since 2002-09-08

Posts 244

4 posted 2003-01-24 01:45 AM

jjote, than you for taking the time to read and comment. You seem to see where the meaning of this piece came from.

ellie LeJeune
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since 2000-01-10

Posts 4156
King of Prussia, PA USA

5 posted 2003-01-24 06:19 AM

so well said, chili, I think we have all known this feeling at one time or another..Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

6 posted 2003-01-24 09:26 PM

I never thought of the stars as being lonely, but I guess they are. Stuck in their appointed place. Love, Joyce

CHILI
Member

since 2002-09-08

Posts 244

7 posted 2003-01-25 10:11 AM

ellie and Joyce, thank you both for taking the time to read and for commenting.

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