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Think of Me As the Purple Sky

aries_luv_ppl
Senior Member

since 2001-09-20

Posts 1448
Universal Mind

0 posted 2002-09-30 06:11 PM

Think of me as the purple sky
With pale blue curtains
Hanging down to you,
Setting a private room for two.

Behind the curtains,
Is my blessing bench for you,
Quietly waited for your awake.

Beyond the curtains,
Is an imagine scenery
Of youth and beautiful-
I wish both you sweet dreams.

If anything
Disturb your sleep,
I would like a dove stay with you,
Till the very end
Of jounery,
Even staying is just a symbol
Of love.

When the wind
Blows the cloud over you,
You know I'm always there for you.

It doesn't matter
Seasons changed,
When you call, I'm already
By your side.

Always, without exceptions,
My arms and shoulders are open,
Ready to lift you up.

Maybe I... am not the friend
You care most,
But I... will always
Stick by you.

//please comment how I can improve this piece. My friend have a girlfriend now, and i'm so happy that Ive written this. But I'm not going to show him this writing

Eliza Simmons
~Sometimes when I look back at what I wrote, I don't recognize the 'Me' in the past anymore.regardless our beliefs.

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2002-09-30 09:32 PM

I cannot improve on this. It is beautiful and I would spoil it if I meddled. Joyce

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

2 posted 2002-09-30 10:20 PM

Eliza: You are writing from your heart and in your own unique style. Don't change it.
No one else can write from your perspective and I think your poem would lose something if anyone tried.

Betty Lou Hebert

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