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Good-Bye Co-written with Jeffrey Carter
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Good-Bye Co-written with Jeffrey Carter |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you to Jeffrey for writing with me once again. You have great talent. It was a pleasure, my friend as always. < !signature--> This poem is rendered in the voices of two people. Man: Saying good-bye is never easy But you know I've gotta go I never meant to hurt you And I want you to know Every time I hear our song I'll always think of us You deserve so much more My love is not enough Woman: No matter how hard I tried I couldn't make you see Would've given the world to you If only it was meant to be I want you to know this much Wouldn't trade one single day Although the pain is great I really have to say Man: We both came into this With visions os growing old Still clinging to each other's hearts How did it grow so cold? We had planned a life together Never dreamed that it would end Nothing left to hold onto now There's no use trying to pretend Woman: I'll never forget that warm day When you and I first met The sun reflected in your eyes And now that sun has set Even though this is over I hope that you know A part of me is with you Wherever you may go Both: How does one get over A love that once was true How does one say "good-bye" To a love the likes of you Maybe one day I'll find myself Falling in love again 'Till then I'll have the memory Of the life that we had planned Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
very nice ... the two of you do well together ... the two perspectives work well here Rex}>{{{{o> |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~You two are sooo awesome. hehe. It's such a well constructed piece of poetry...yet it brings ache to this heart of mine. Again,...so well done. Please take care. *Peace. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
let's see...hmmmmm..Vince Gill and Shania? Nice collabaration. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
You two seem to be so good at this... Way to go, Jeffery and Lone Wolf... Regards, Sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you guys rock  this is a perfect duet!! pretty soon you guys are gonna have to do a greatest hits collection!! keep em coming ... love ya both later-perfect-match-gators jm you can say baby baby can I hold you tonite maybe if I said the right words at the right time you'd be mine baby can I hold you tonite Tracy C |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Wolf, a marvel indeed how the flow seemed to weave thru man to woman and such feelings expressed I am indeed impressed with this one. Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 06-28-2000).] |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This was nice writing by both of you. Seem to be in sync with each other. Lots of emotion in the words. ~~well done~~ dh |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've done it again ... and beautifully! The flow and perspective was just wonderful ... really well done! Applause to you both!! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Rex . . . Thank you from us both. We thought so too. Jeffrey has great ideas. Spit Fire . . . Thanks, we try. Had fun with this one. Sorry to hear we brought you pain. I hope it goes away soon. Jamie . . . Why not? LOL Sudhir . . . We enjoy it. Thanks for the encouragement. JM . . . We think YOU rock!!! We will do not worry!! Hmmm...greatest hits?? Jeffrey, we have hits?? LOL J/K!!! Coco . . . We are happy that you are impressed. Dh . . . Yes, we have simialer styles and think alike . . .oohhh, scary!! LOL. Thank you. Kit . . . Thank you, Jeffrey - do we bow now or later?? hehe Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
BRAVO!!!!! I love this idea and the combo of the two of you make it perfect!!! Encore!! btw...my ICQ keeps locking up my computer today...  we will talk SOON!! |
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Holly Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 127Arkansas |
THIS PIECE ROCKS! Facing the same situation in my own life...it hits directly to the heart. I'm so glad someone else can express this for me. Man, I feel like you 2 were reading my mind...I like this. love & all, -Holly I know well what I am fleeing from but not what I am in search of. Michel de Montaigne |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
One question everyone.....If a ton of feathers fell on your head would it hurt? LOL Of course it would.....A ton is a ton after all  Thank you all for all your support and encouragement Jennifer..umm...Lone Wolf and I really enjoy writing together, we always have a good laugh (who doesn't need to do that everyday huh?) Without the support of all of you our efforts would be nothing. So, I thank you from the bottom of my heart All of your kind replies are .....  All my love, Jeffrey |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeffrey, Should we experiment with that ton of feathers?? LOL . . . you are too funny!! We will have to do this again soon. Thank you to all who replied. We appreciate it!!  BDC . . . I understand, we'll catch up!! Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. --William Wordsworth |
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