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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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-cream soda friendship- to b. She can make me smile when my mind is a dark cloud. Yes, while I'm weighing the texture, coloring the temperature, Figuring out the size of the hail, if any rainbows might appear From the cloud's furthest sections, She makes me laugh. Just a simple message or two; that's all that's needed. I told her I'd write a poem about her. After all, she's given me many inspirations Ranging from the hills of Malibu crumbling, churning in fire, To the simple symbol of a bird in flight, And on into places she doesn't even know exists Until I map it out in painful words. I am the architect and the cartographer, The choreographer and the theologian To thoughts even I didn't know were there. She constructs a church, free of cobwebs, Where I may worship language as an instrument of god's grace, But please -- let's save face. I promised this poem wouldn't be corny. I don't think it is. Yet. I guess I just want to say, Thank you for knowing how to play. For wearing the names of Cool Dark Chick and Dark Lady of Laughter with the humor required To wear them. Let's sit in the shade outside, Where the California sun can't blame or find. We'll talk, cream soda in cans on the table. (nobody else would ever drink that stuff, would they?) At least we can pretend we're still young and able. I was just kidding with that last line, okay? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I am the architect and the cartographer, The choreographer and the theologian To thoughts even I didn't know were there. She constructs a church, free of cobwebs, Where I may worship language as an instrument of god's grace, But please -- let's save face. I promised this poem wouldn't be corny. I don't think it is. Yet. I guess I just want to say, Thank you for knowing how to play. For wearing the names of Cool Dark Chick and Dark Lady of Laughter with the humor required To wear them. ------------ you couldnt write a corny poem if ya tried  this one wrote out WAY COOL... just like the poet... later-cream soda-gator(butterfly slippers loves cream soda)  me baby dont you work so hard for this prize you've found, it will all be gone-when you turn around, cause nothing lasts forever anyway. Rick Roberts |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Not corny at all Mike ... sweet and tender from the heart. Nicely penned! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
As Wet Willie would say,, "keep on smilin" but keep the soda..lol nice playful poem. Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is a tender tribute...I like this much, Mike...playful and sweet, I think endearing comes to mind too...but I'll stop now, I wouldn't want to get all corny about it...hee hee hee... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike, this is tender and a little funny, but not corny...I think it needs a new word, a combination of precious and wow....or something. Loved it! [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mike~ I really enjoy your poetry, I'm sure I've told you that enough now This is so sweet, I love this kind of friendship!  -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
LOL, cute poem..corny? I like corny..corny dogs, candy corny, creamed corny..  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oh, I don't know...I bet you could get really corny if you tried... This, however, is simple, genuine, and sweet. Just right. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, everyone. Wow, this has gotten a lot of attention for a small tribute to a good friend -- even moreso than some of my "Voices of the Web" submissions. Maybe I should post it there for voting? Hmmm.... nah. This one should stay small and secret. By the way, my friend loved it.Mike |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ I like ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Mike, Much enjoyed, thanks for sharing, Cerenity |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks Marge and Cerenity. Mike |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I love rambled thoughts formed into poetry, neat poem Mike....and I adore Cream Soda!  ~Heather |
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