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Terra Incognizant
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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TERRA INCOGNIZANT You would think by now, I would know my way around, I shouldn't miss you so badly, I should be on familiar ground. How many more lonely years, must meander by, until I learn the lesson, it does no good to cry. What manner of iron will, must some people possess, to be always looking forward, to never accept regress. Perhaps if I was willing, to let someone take me by the hand, they could show me a happy place, in this unfamiliar land. Perhaps I'm only homesick, for all the joys that once were mine, I must accept that they and you, belong to another place and time. But I know that deep within my heart, there's a place where only you reside, and when the pain of lonliness comes, it knows that is where I hide. So if sometimes it seems to you, I'm clinging to the past, it's mostly because I can't yet accept, that our love didn't last. No matter how hard I try, I've yet to get over you, for the part of me that's still alive, believes you love me too. Maybe there will come a day, when that part will finally die, and feeling strong with a heart reborn, a new love I will finally try. And what a splendid day that will be, when I awaken to discover, I'm happily learning a great new land, with a great new friend and lover. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Prometheus, This is the second time tonight that you have made me say this.....WOW!!!! Keep 'em coming! All my love, Jeffrey |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thank You Jeffrey, There were a lot of tears shed on the paper on which that one was written. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
You will indeed be a wonderful addition to our family. Your writing is deep and you have the gift of the pen. Marina It is blessing to have wings for your words, and passion to flow from pen. Marina Crossley |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Marina, Thou dost causeth me to redden. Thanks very much.. I have enjoyed your poems as well. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Pain is a great teacher...and being able to write about it so beautifully with such emotion.....wonderful |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Paula, As I said to someone earlier tonight, "the pain lessens but the ache will always remain" .. and thanks for the compliment |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Fantasmagical... such a great work with such torment in the words. Well done again. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But I know that deep within my heart, there's a place where only you reside, and when the pain of lonliness comes, it knows that is where I hide. So if sometimes it seems to you, I'm clinging to the past, it's mostly because I can't yet accept, that our love didn't last. No matter how hard I try, I've yet to get over you, for the part of me that's still alive, believes you love me too. ------------------- some people leave deeper imprints on our hearts than others... some things take more time to get over... again I will say...you write with much depth of your emotions... its obvious this one cuts deep. well written and expressed take care, jm baby dont you work so hard for this prize you've found, it will all be gone-when you turn around, cause nothing lasts forever anyway. Rick Roberts |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
So if sometimes it seems to you, I'm clinging to the past, it's mostly because I can't yet accept, that our love didn't last. No matter how hard I try, I've yet to get over you, for the part of me that's still alive, believes you love me too. Maybe there will come a day, when that part will finally die, and feeling strong with a heart reborn, a new love I will finally try. And what a splendid day that will be, when I awaken to discover, I'm happily learning a great new land, with a great new friend and lover ...... Prometheus, This is simply wonderful...what great way of putting down painful sentiments...well expressed... regards, sudhir Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This was a great read, very enjoyable. I hope you discover that journey and travel it's path for a lifetime. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW, this is fantastic!!  Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Liked the last two lines the most...cause when we finally let go is when we finally go on....I hope...cause thats what I'm doing right now...moving on. The title was way cool. James |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Mark; Janet; Sudhir; Traci; Angel, and jmlee, Thanks so much for the soft words and honeyed phrases... your kindness is appreciated. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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H. Arlequin Member
since 1999-08-23
Posts 210 |
Well done Prometheus, kutgw, HA |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Seems we walk the same paths ...as most do now and then, a well worn path with thorny roses that snag you along the way. How nice it would be to skip the walk and be at the end...a nice field with wild flowers and a soft breeze of beautiful thoughts. Very well written~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
H.Arlequin, Thank you very much. And, kutgw? To the Butterfly to whom I shall make it a personal goal to cry: As tempting as it would be to skip the hardships on life's journeys, we would miss some really nice things along the way. And after all, the journey is what makes up life, not the destination. Thank You for the warm flowery breeze! jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Tanga Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 39BC Canada |
Ah the light of the tunnel has flickered. You see love does not die, but multiplies. Bask in the love that once was and will always be. You were blessed. Take the hand and journey onto your new land. Hugss <**> |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Beautifully expressed pain here. Wonderful poem!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Tanga-- Some sojourns upon which we embark are thrust upon us, yet travel we must. Thanks for taking the time to reply. ESP-- Thank you for your reply and the contributions of yours I have enjoyed as well. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Siren's Song Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 17 |
Jamie.. I'm doing this under protest... lol seriously, since you have first shared your poetry with me, this has been and still is my favorite. |
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Tanga Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 39BC Canada |
alas, thrusted sojourns I know only too well, Jamie. But what a wonderous journey beholds us now ! Cherish what was! Behold what there is to come! New beginnings! hugss <**> |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow, Jamie. Such longing and sadness! This is wonderful. I'm so glad I could vote for it before it was too late!  |
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oh2beme Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 215NV USA |
What a wonderful view on the pain of a lost love and the passion of a new found friend. I truly enjoyed this read and hope to see more of your work. |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
My vote is in! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Prometheus~ How wearied our paths can sometimes be ... but, as you point out .... 'the journey is what makes up life, not the destination.' We pause - we recall ... the tears come and dilute the sorrow of the loss ... we move on ... always mindful of where we've been. Glad you felt you could share the emotion. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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