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My Jar of Stars
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My Jar of Stars |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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This was first posted in the corner pub as a response to Brian's wonderful challenge... Since then I have changed a few lines here and there cut out some wayward (presumptuously) misguided lines and here it is in its present form... My JAR of STARS (JAR  Just Another Ramble)Year 2020, it was when I met Mr. Bond, J a m e s B o n d  Quite old, he was then, Grumpy and coughing, Freckled and puffing. Youth had thus vanished from the most unlikely star that had graced Planet Earth's 'holy' woods. It seemed as if age had finally caught up with him! Well, by then Superman had died, Spiderman got lost caught in his own web. And He-man ~ he met a she-woman, got married, was kids-a-raising instead of doing the world-a-saving by the power of his Grey Skull No grey matter though had ever existed, never so, Just yeoman heroism of occult!  F l a s h G o r d o n was just a mere icon, fighting Mighty Ming using Virtual Reality Machines, And dominoes-a-playing Mandrake sat joined by beautiful Narda, Where was his twin Cobra? While Mickey, he simply was with mini enjoying his life and Uncle Donald selfishly laughed loud enough to make me scoff!  Then Bond said to me "I am Bond, James (cough) (cough) Bond, Cigarette Agent from Tobacco Land Agency". A growl of a cough and he fell down, I picked him up, held him, patted his back, And out came a periscope from the back of his wrinkled neck. And out came a note which read Upon my death tell Her Majesty's Cigarette Service,  Tobacco is harmful with Nicotine its poison, Whilst Caffeine is exhilaratingly vile; He died breathing his last forlornly puffed breath!  And all I could then think was - Stars have their moment and then they die In the rain with heartfelt pain,  We as fans simply await to see a new star's rise beyond the horizon. Realising sadly that a fallen star is no idol anymore - Time to move on to the next star and then praise him to highest heavens till he dies suffocated by a false invincibility myth, surrounding him! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sudhir-What a message. Great read and though it be a serious one I found myself chuckling in some spots. Your talent is always a treasure to read.  ( me thinks parts are serious) [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-26-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Was this supposed to be serious? I laughed all the way through (sorry) I was never into super heroes, so I was kind of glad spider man got caught in his own web. I loved this poem, and apologize for laughing. Though the tobacco part is close to my heart, even super heroes die from smoking, and that isn't so funny. But your poem is great, and I'm still smiling Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Mark and Liz, You are both right on cue here... only the last stanza is filled with anything close to being sensible... thats why probably its a JAR of stars... Thanks a great deal for joining in the fun and lets make this a laugh-riot soon.... Keep smiling, regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 07-26-2000).] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You've written well! It's serious, but humorous too. So often these 'stars' are held as idols. They do fall regardless, and put their pants on one leg at a time just like we do. I really enjoyed this one Sudhir! |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Sudhir, you've put it so well. Mere humans these idols we make. I totally loved this. Thanks for the chuckles. Hmmmm, just wondering what happened to batman,lol. Take care Sudhir, Juls |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WhtDove, Truly spoken indeed... Thanks for reading and for your response... Juliet, well, batman and robin went hunting for the riddler but then bat girl knocked them down and you know what - even phantom went riding - a hooded "hero" with "devil" behind him... Thanks for joining in the fun... I have to thank Brian first and foremost for the catch line... and the inspiration and the rest is all perspiration as they say... regards, sudhir [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 07-26-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sudhir...you are quite a character...I enjoy it when you ramble like this, I think it's a relaxing type of poetry and great fun...I hear some of the others saying you should write a book...well my friend if you do I think you could become the new Lewis Carrol.. take care......ethome.. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sudhir---humor can be serious too...loved your sly message and the delivery was Fun!!! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
Sudhir, you've done it again, my friend ... just when i think a subject is out-of-bounds, you come up with a winner ... nice work ... My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ethome, Lewis Caroll... Oh My! Thanks... but I still think I am trillions of miles away from that... serenity, glad that it was a fun ride... thanks for coming in... MA Miller, Thanks for the kind comments... regards to all, sudhir |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sudhir Iyer, This is great! Congradulations on this wonderful write. I'm glad I stopped by. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
OMG you slammed all my heroes HAHAHAHAHA....I so enjoyed this read Sudhir...you have such a way with words and emotions never say never |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sudhir, ROFL........loved this!!!! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Bill Charles, I am glad that you stopped by too... Thanks Paula, Sorry for the slamming... but I guess it had to be done ... Thanks Lone Wolf, I am so happy that you loved this one... Thanks regards to all, sudhir. [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 07-27-2000).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A wonderful ride on a superheroic parody of epic proportions...... but what was the challenge????...btw- i chose to release myself from tobacco's viselike grip this past January. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jamie, The challenge was to write a poem with the words "Stars have their moment and then they die"... I am glad that you kicked out the habit... Thanks for reading adn your wonderful response... regards, sudhir |
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