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Open Poetry #8

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redheart angrybraids
Member

since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

0 posted 2000-06-25 08:39 PM

Eroded just in time
to pepper out my mind,
untie gelid tides, and
touch the breast of hollowed pride.
Awoke solaced
in the crest
of untold(truthed, confessed, undone, made right)lies.
Unfolded my wrinkled eyes
and saw that
life was just
a simple sigh.

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

Dawn Eclipse
Senior Member

since 2000-01-31

Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula

1 posted 2000-06-25 08:57 PM

Wow! This was a great poem.

Wonderful job, I loved your details.

"Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*

redheart angrybraids
Member

since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

2 posted 2000-06-29 12:36 PM

thank you dawn eclipse,
kindly,
redheart angrybraids

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-06-29 01:25 PM

very cool poem
perfect imagery
and I love the emotions of the last lines
excellent expression
take care, jm

you can say baby
baby can I hold you tonite
maybe if I said the right words
at the right time
you'd be mine
baby can I hold you tonite

Tracy C

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

4 posted 2000-06-29 01:56 PM

Hi Angelbraids,

Oh my dear this is awesome, wow so wonderful a keeper for sure thanks so much for this one loved it.

Cerenity

redheart angrybraids
Member

since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

5 posted 2000-06-29 04:09 PM

love to all of you and your gentle replys,

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids

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