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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
U Rummaging through the basement Now insecure but was content In a shoebox appeared a letter I fear not open, addressed to my lover Tied with a bow I just had to know The identity of the sender My deepest fears surrender A tear in my eye My heart did cry An insecure effect But who's love did it reflect I sat there and balled Then a soft voice had called "Honey what are you doing down there" Couldn't speak, just cried with fear As she came down the stairs Then wiped off my tears Her soft voice had spoken "What's wrong your heart looks broken" Sadly I handed her the letter But her frown changed to better A glow on her face A smile did replace Then she put her arm around me Opened the bow to see My sad tears dry Turn to a happy cry She looked deep in my eyes As we both let out cries And said, "Never be blue" "This letter is from U" |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh Boy,...and just as I began to sleep...Insect posts a poem. Heard the snapping and awoke to read this treasure. Look what you did to yourself. Silly. Aaawww,,...it was you all along. How cute the feelings you portray in this one. Wonderful. Hooray,...so glad it ended on a happy note. Take care. Now you know after your last reply to mine I have to sign off this way. *Peace.  . [This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 06-11-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
glad of the happy ending. a sweet poem. really enjoyed reading this. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. manic street preachers "Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair" "I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP "And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper. ----- |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Awwwwwwwwww that's soooo sweet!!! What a wonderful ending also. Is that suppossed to be the ending of my "It's You" poem?.LOL Oh! I was going to respond with a poem for that but I figured, hmmmmmm..I don't know. LOL  Kat |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Insect, It was you all along!! That is wonderful. Do not look unless you are prepared for what you'll find. I am glad she was true to you. Great poem!! Had me hanging on everyword. Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
insect, You are one diverse individual! I've enjoyed reading your verses. I really liked the insecurity overtones in this one. Everyone feels them, few admit it so well. I have been to see the world. Tasted life at every turn. And all the time your face came back to haunt me. -Chris DeBurgh |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
SpitFire…(SNAP!)  "Zzzzzz" When you go to sleep tonight you will dream about insect! Do you understand? "*Peace" Your next poem will be about insect in a dream! Do you understand? "*Peace" (SNAP!) Thank you SpitFire for a wonderful reply!! (SNAP!) "Zzzzzz" Oh ya! Your pillow will become insect! Do you understand? "*Peace, *Peace" (SNAP!) brian madden…(SNAP!) "Zzzzzz" Oops!! (SNAP!) Thank you very much brian! kat…Awwwww!! Thank you. U sweet little pussy kat. It was inspired by your love letter. I did leave another poem at the end of "It's You". Did you see it? Yes you can respond with a poem! kat, you can laugh at anything you want, it's just poetry. I'm here to have fun with it and your doing a great job in making it fun. My poem "Kit-Kat" was inspired by you too! You’re a roar!!! LOL Lone Wolf…Thanks a lot Lone Wolf! Trew…Thank you Trew and welcome to Passions! [This message has been edited by insect (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
insect, very good read, the ending surprised me. Parker |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This was a wonderful tale!! I loved the ending, I was waiting for a cliff hanger or a twist but was pleased to see a happy ending Thank you for sharing this~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"U", insect, are now on my list of "must-read" enjoy your work immensely...thanks... |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent writing dear Insect, and such a happy ending ... I just adored this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Haleyja…(BOW) Thank you your Haleyness!! Butterflies_don't_cry…Thank you serenity…Your welcome…Please tell me more! The calm sky is in your eye Filled with birds to fly None prettier than this dove Flying higher then love Kit McCallum…And I adore you…. Love your poems too! SNAP! Don't worry! Just listening to tunes! |
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AMaZing Junior Member
since 2000-06-26
Posts 10 |
Can't wait to read your other poems!! Great Work!! :0) |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Insect~ yet another that I really like! I think you are going in my liabrary now.....just stay away from my pillow, I have enough crazy dreams  -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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star216 Junior Member
since 2000-06-26
Posts 11 |
Great poem. Glad it ended on a positive note. Eager to read more of your work. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Happy endings do most folks please, it could have been tragic with equal ease. enjoyed it! |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
AMaZing…Hi and welcome to Passions I like your name! Go to search and (click) most of my poems are in OPEN#7 and OPEN#8. Thank you for responding. SEA…Thank you SEA Hugging the Pillow Your voice calls out Moaning then shouts Suddenly you're awake But the fantasy was fake U hurry back to sleep For this fantasy to keep But it's lost in space U can't remember the face A new dream begins to shower You're standing beside a flower Insects are flying everywhere U try to block the suns glare U catch one in your net Heat from the sun makes u sweat The little insect stares in your eye He just wants u to let him fly U let him fly away Insect is on his way U open your eyes hugging the pillow Just as the prettiest insect flies through your window I had to write U this if your going to put me in your library. THANKS SEA star216…Thank U and welcome to Passions Go to search and (click) if U would like to read some of my poems in OPEN#7 and OPEN#8 I'd love to hear your response on any of them. Thanks again. Prometheus…Thank you I'm glad U enjoyed the poem! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Did you think, I'd not reply? You spied calm within my eye... HURRICANE-- and passion spent... how could I, would I not relent? Simple breeze, I tilt my head, and gasp, relieved-- I am not dead. A simple pleasure, sounds absurd, but simple rhyme of poet's word-- is all I need-- I am not dead... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Insect~ trust me... you are so in my library!!!! -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Atmospheric Romance Mountain rocks sleep with no care When a silence fills the air Then a wind takes fruit from the tree Caged animal's fight to be free Hurricane serenity arrives Dominating the skies She blows fear throughout Falling trees try to shout She's a cyclone waterspout Moving objects about But serenity's eye is calm A vortex in her palm She awaits her lover Mister Along comes Insect twister Spinning a thousand miles They mate with destructive smiles Together the ultimate force Love killers without remorse Two storms bound together An intimate fulfillment of weather Insect blasts up debris Serenity is multiplied by three A shaking and pounding disturbance In a violent atmospheric romance Insect twister spins around Giving a magnetic thunder of sound Hurricane serenity blows on south Blowing kisses from the winds of her mouth Out to sea she rains her good-byes While the twister is lost in the calm of her eye Once again all the birds begin to fly From space serenity is the dove in the sky THANKS serenity |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...y'know...I've been hit or miss in the forum lately, and I did miss this one...thanks for letting me know...serenely smiling now--I thank you, insect, quite lovely and you seem to know me very well... |
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