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One Syllable Poem(for parker's challenge)
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One Syllable Poem(for parker's challenge) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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Like a snake, Pain shows its gross head Scared out of my wits, I run far fast Yet it grabs hold of me tight and bites me hard Lone me hurt, I fall to this deep dark hole No one to hear my screams No one to help me |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
Wow, one syllable, that is very cool. Great poem, although I'd like to get you a demoral. If this was your pain, I hope it's been relieved. Best wishes. |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
Interesting idea....and quite challenging too...have to try that myself.. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Very good kaile. . . You have done well. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
The challenge is well met, Kaile. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Nicely done Kaile, looks like I'm going to have to give this a go too *gulp* Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
kaile, very interesting.... Sven really started this as an open challenge, I just made some remark about one syllable... and so it goes.... lol Well to answer your other question, On how many emails.... well secrets secrets secrets... Great job by the way... Parker [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 06-23-2000).] |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great work here to. but i must say if your going to read all of my worh i'll have to read all of yours so keep the replies coming and i'll keep bring them to you. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Kaile--I like this much---I consider symbolism of snake as interpretation of WISDOM---(consider the caduceus--symbol of the medical profession--two serpents entertwined--"with all your wisdom, get understanding"--upon the staff of mercury--messenger of the gods...) very nice, very deep, I applaud you and curtsey... |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thanx all for ur generous comments...perhaps i try this one syllable poem challenge one more time  |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
kaile -- I really enjoyed reading this. I love the imagery and the power of it! Excellent job! Thank you for your kind responses to my posts. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Hope you didn't have too rough a period of time... Hope also that this is only reflection, rather than experience...  _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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