Open Poetry #8 |
The Night You Left |
whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
" The Night you Left " Sirens sound All around Clock ticks So very loud You lay in pain On my legs Help is needed Not found I see you slip Your eyes they roll No longer conscious I speak to you You cannot hear A tear I cry I feel you drift Away from this world My grip Is lost A knock at the door Bursting through Sirens so loud Unheard to me My love is gone My friend is no more You lay in sweat Upon the floor Why couldnt you tell Did you not trust My friend you are Alive and in death Never will I forget That growling Night That night that you Left this life A scream I sounded When confirmed to me A cry full of pain Now left just memory Of a friend The best I knew Every year I shed a tear As I sit next to your grave I talk to you Do you hear The life I tell you of My friend I miss My heart is lost Without you here I miss you |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
How sad, Whiskey. I am so sorry for the loss of your friend, and I felt such hurt while reading this. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Thankyou Elizabeth For reading and your kind words |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I'm sorry you had to endure this heartbreak. I hope your heart is soothed by writing this beautiful poetry and healing will embrace you. James |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Whiskey~ this is terribly sad, I can't imagine how it must hurt you..... -SEA Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I am saddened by your loss, Whiskey...and very moved for these devotional sentiments that you express... Every year I shed a tear As I sit next to your grave I talk to you Do you hear The life I tell you of My friend I miss My heart is lost Without you here I miss you .... regards and take care, sudhir |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I liked it a lot!!!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Whiskey~ *Hugs*, sweetie. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
just think of it this way whiskey..your friend is looking at you from above...do you really think he/she wants to see you sad? |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Whiskey~ This is soo terribly sad you must be missing your friend dreadfully Hugs Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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