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If You Would Allow
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If You Would Allow |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 If you would let me I could make your dreams come true If you would allow it to be I could show you the love you never knew ~*~ I could warm your soul Like the sun on a cool day I would empower you to be whole While in my arms you lay ~*~ I would show you the beauty That lies within you I would make it my loving duty To be everything for you ~*~ I would show you the magical touch Of a velveteen embrace Give you what you've wanted so much All your pain I’d erase ~*~ If you would let your guard down Unlock your heart’s bolted door I’d remove fear’s thorny crown While filling you sweetly to the core ~*~ I’d awaken you like flowers in spring bloom Bring you the moon that once was to far Show you there's beauty where the shadows loom I'd be the wish you made upon the falling star ~*~ Your Wants would become my Desire Your Needs would become my Song Each step taking you higher Showing you in my arms is where you belong ~*~ If you would only allow me I'd be your everything and more Please Love... listen to my plea Come to me and unlock the door ~*~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, Great writing here my friend. You have spoke volumes to my heart with this one. It is a keeper for sure.  LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Butterflies, this says everything I want to say. It's beautiful. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yes yes yes... this one had to be one of the ones to reflect your work...and im SO SEROIUS about lastnights poem... submit!!! its awesome girl... dont tell me that stuff about love poems not being your strong suit anymore... SUBMIT that baby love ss me |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
The pushy one first...lol J.M.* thank you first of all for your loving response and secondly OK OK OK I'll submit it! And NO they are not my strong suit  I'll sing that from the roof tops...lolL.W.* Thank you I appreciate you kindness and your friendship so much~ Elizabeth* Thank you for reading and your kind reply~ |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Oh this is so beautiful. I loved it. ~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry W |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
B_D_C~ this is so romantic and lovely. -SEA |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And who says opportunity only knocks once? |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Not your strong suit????? You sure had me fooled  All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Butterfly, this one in my eyes is the best I have read All of your poetry seems to captivate my heart And my mind just wanders to another place and time  Lovely Coco |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Butterflies, this is gorgeous with lovely sentiments. Definitely deserves another read. *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
My dear friend! I have to agree with Janet about the love poems, your work is proof of your talent in that area. This is simply beautiful! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
What beauty this piece presents, you have written a very longingly, touching poem here and I enjoyed the read. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
You have an amazing talent. This was a truly beautiful poem. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A very beautiful love poem this one.... Very good work, enjoyed this quite a lot... regards, sudhir. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Angel* Thank you so much~ Sea* Thank You Christopher* What's behind door #2? Jeffrey* LOL...I leave it up to you....my opinion doesn't seem to matter Coco* Thank you so much, your reply was very very kind~ Krista* Always a sweetie you are thank you~Eagle* I'll just shut up and listen to my butterfly catcher's from now on...lol Thank you my dear friend Tracie* Thank you very much for reading~ Jan* Thank you from the bottom of my heart, I'm happy you think so~ Sudhir* Thank you, I'm very glad you enjoyed it~ |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Butterfly: If only our intendeds could open up their hearts and let us in, I know how you feel. Nice piece. |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Lovely lovely poem!!! Very good writing....I hope this door can be opened for you!! Julie :) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
would show you the magical touch Of a velveteen embrace Give you what you've wanted so much All your pain I’d erase ~*~ If you would let your guard down Unlock your heart’s bolted door I’d remove fear’s thorny crown While filling you sweetly to the core ~*~ I’d awaken you like flowers in spring bloom Bring you the moon that once was to far Show you there's beauty where the shadows loom I'd be the wish you made upon the falling star THese were my favourite verses, "Of a velveteen embrace" wow a beautiful image. A wondeful poem, tender, very beautiful, lovely. a great poem. < !signature--> A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-21-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Gemini* I'm sorry that you can relate...tough place to be~ Thank you so much for reading* Julie* I appreciate the thoughts and the kind reply, thank you~ Brian* The always much to sweet you Thank you for reading, I was pretty proud of the velveteen line...lol thanks~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I will "FOREVER" love you!!! |
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