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Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan

0 posted 2000-06-18 12:16 PM




Rise Mocking Sun
    Hellish Day Begun

Mind Asking Why
    Refusing To Cry

Cloaked In Pain
    Calling The Rain
    
Cleanse My Soul
    Fill Me Whole
    
Rise Loving  Moon
    Silver Stars Loom
    
Day’s Torment Done
    Peaceful Walk Begun



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Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

1 posted 2000-06-18 12:20 PM


I like the style of this one...

and you have used some excellent imagery here...


Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-06-18 01:01 AM


lots of butterfly slippers  *smile*

well this just DRIPS with ache me SS
beautiful and cryptic in a haunted sort of way...
I like seeing you try a new "style"
always need new ways to PURGE ...
you know ... I know ...
feel better baby...please  
love ya
jm

It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
(How one move just puts me by myself)
There you go just trusting someone else
(Now I know I put us both through hell) ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
(I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me)
And I'm not sayin
(We ever had the right to hold on)
(I just didn't wanna let you get away from me)
~MB20~

She says baby,
It's 3AM ... I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.
~MB20~


Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2000-06-18 01:56 AM


BDC,

Great writing my friend.  Short and sweet.  Love your imagery here.  Very nice.  You say it so well...  

**HUGS**
LW



Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith


tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
4 posted 2000-06-18 02:45 AM


wonderful writings sweet butterflies
lovely imagery and layout  
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe


netswan
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
5 posted 2000-06-18 02:50 AM


Butterfly - this is well done. Sad,
but done with such style

~netswan

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

6 posted 2000-06-18 04:40 AM


"Peaceful Walk Begun"

Indeed, a peaceful stroll through dreams and night's release. Wonderful work here, butterfly!

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
7 posted 2000-06-18 05:02 AM


Day’s Torment Done
Peaceful Walk Begun

wonderfully written Butterflies. Especially love the last two lines, it is strange how hard it can be to start that "Peaceful Walk"
but the effort is always worth it.  




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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

"Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso

"We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde


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ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
8 posted 2000-06-18 06:11 AM


Like the song says "what a difference a day makes, twenty-four hours of your time."
Nice style and nice touch.

ESP
Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
9 posted 2000-06-18 06:37 AM


This says alot in so few words. I love it!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
10 posted 2000-06-18 08:42 AM


Wonderfully written...
Enjoyed this one

Regards, sudhir

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
11 posted 2000-06-18 08:58 PM



Thank you all so much, I wasn't sure if I
was going to share this one or not...now I'm
very glad I did, to touch one person or to
make one person feel that they are not alone
makes all the difference in the world to
me.  Thank you so much!

Jan
Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114

12 posted 2000-06-18 10:45 PM


I didn't have any new comments to add--I just want to add my voice to all of those who loved your poem.
Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
13 posted 2000-09-27 05:12 PM


I will "FOREVER" love you!!!
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