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Open Poetry #8

The Turning Point

di Morte
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since 2000-05-13

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0 posted 2000-06-20 03:24 PM

The Turning Point

It poured the day the brightest died,
a summer soggy spirit drowned
gray caissons sunk to axle depth,
before our manly tears had dried.
Apt recompense from fates that frowned
on Lee, his promise hence unkept

to gold and gray, the mission's goal,
Virginia muck had sucked to earth
as Abner to king Saul's right hand.
As steady rain soaked to the soul
the living dead, despair gave birth
to anxious dread that swept a land

where yesterday rang guarantees.
Drooped hat brims dripped on sodden chests
that paid respects to Lionheart,
their last salute, the warranties
in blood of honorees' behests.
The fallen spells his warrior's art.

The rifles spoke an ordered word,
a language of their own, "Adieu,
good knight, rest well, one day we greet
a land where men at war, absurd."
A north wind chilled as bugles blew
and Taps foretold the South's defeat.

--Fr. Veni di Morte

[This message has been edited by di Morte (edited 06-22-2000).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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1 posted 2000-06-20 04:47 PM

I like this...it speaks well of many good things to come from your pen...

Welcome, welcome to Passions...

Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

2 posted 2000-06-20 07:11 PM

Superbly told...wonderful style! I, too, look forward to reading more.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

di Morte
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 8

3 posted 2000-06-21 07:55 PM

thanks for the lovely sentiments,

vdm

di Morte
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since 2000-05-13

Posts 8

4 posted 2000-06-23 11:10 PM

snow in summer
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since 1999-08-28

Posts 67

5 posted 2000-06-28 09:34 PM

strong form and great story here

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