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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! 
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mirror mirror hanging on my wall please don't speak any words at all trying not to look you in the eye for fear i might break down and start to cry loving was not easy for us after all shattered glass now laying at my feet a broken soul lost in those shards i kneel now and begin to weep why did he always hold the cards??? he gave me all, still i wanted more.. the grass greener on the other side of town now i've cursed my....wedding gown pick up the pieces of my broken dreams my life is over and broken at the seams why could i not resist the aching deep inside? why did he know every time I lied? passion ruled my world and then it left.. tell me will i ever pass this test? Julie :) |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh Julie, this poem is so sad! I'm sorry that things didn't work out, but you'll come through it, I'm sure. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
julie, good poem. very "open-me-up" and soulful. it speaks from the heart. the guilt trip is a hard one, but you'll push through. people always do. we've all got our demons, right? We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow this is a very cool poem... very well expressed emotions and the imagery of the shattered mirror made the poem deep soul searching... good luck to ya in finding the answers... seem us poets are always searching take care, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~JulieAnn,...this poem bleeds emotion. Wow,...such vivid details...and so well written. Take care. *Peace. |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
This is an easy read, and belongs in the book --- so full of emotional pain Yes, you will learn Julie -- trust me The grass is never greener on the otherside and these guilt things do subside - If this is a pattern then one must look to their comfort zones and find out why one goes about ruining a perfectly good relationship. There is a book called "Woman who love too much" by Robin Norwood -- I am sure you can find it -- ~netswan |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Take care Julie and everything will turn well. Keep faith in god and in yourself. Sincerely A_L |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Very emotional and very sad JulieAnn Take care, sudhir |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
The big bully! I liked this Julie  ~Heather |
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