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pyro Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 12 |
Deepest dark secrets, whispered in my ear... the numbness creeps in-come, my dear; awake the first sharp thrill of fear mad,wild laughter, ringing clear... come, my sweetest, here-come near hide behind the velvet night submit to chilling cold's sharp bite enveloped by its flowing dark... thick like honey,black as death danger, with each silent breath, draws closer, and a single tear slides down one cheek, but none to hear and none to see, the silent screams of pain in psychedelic dreams the broken, shattered mind is lost, and only thoughts of death adhere all else blocked out by blinding pain, and only thoughts of death remain... |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Pyro, this was a clear look at the thoughts of a depressed soul. Thank you for sharing. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
quite the vivid picture you paint. i know these scenes all too well. if this is autobiographical, i hope this doesn't last long, as these feelings tend to do. good luck, and welcome to Passions. i hope your stay is long and comfortable =) i sound like a concierge... *the bellboy will help you with your things!* 'til next time. We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
vivid, wonderful writing! welcome to passions! will look forward to reading more of your work. this is well crafted, honest, forceful, and powerful... thanks for the read |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Very well done. This should be posted in Dark Passions - perhaps you will visit and take up a seat and stay a while... Looking forward to seeing more. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP "Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Welcome to Passions, Pyro! Great poem -- very well written! Keep on writing. ~netswan |
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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. |
Welcome to passoins Pyro... sheesh, I know exactly what this poem is expressing... I am feeling pretty down myself lately... this poem expresses a lot of what I'm feeling... thanks for posting it, I really enjoyed the read. "It was my love that did us both to death. " -Sylvia Plath |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Pyro, Nice writing for your first post here. Very dark and expressive. Hope to see more of your work. Welcome to Passions!!  LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
You have captured the feelings of depression very well, Great poem ill Look forward to reading more of your work Julie |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"the numbness creeps in-come, my dear; awake the first sharp thrill of fear" Interesting writing, Pyro, and an intensely emotive piece. Welcome, please share more. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Depression runs deep, you explained it well. I hope in your writing it doesn't stay in your heart. |
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