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Don't Let It Be This Way
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Don't Let It Be This Way |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! 
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Don't Let It Be This Way < !signature-->As the rain was falling from the sky She placed the gun up to her head She just couldn't help but think That she'd be better off dead Life had just gotten unbearable Since her husband passed away So she decided to join him On this God-forsaken day As she sat there trembling With all the memories rushing by She recalled their first kiss Then she started to cry The words that he had said that day Brought a glimmer to her eye Till her mind sped forward To the day her lover died She remembered telling him "I don't love you anymore" He went storming from the house Slamming their front door She got a call late that night To tell her he was gone She could never say "I'm sorry" He was never coming home She wondered how she could go on How she could ever forgive herself but then As she sat there crying in the rain She heard his voice again "I have always loved you Please know you hold my heart One day we will be together Never again to part I know right now you feel Such an awful pain But I am begging you Don't let it be this way" Just then as she looked up A rainbow filled the sky She knew it was his sign to her This wasn't how she was supposed to die As the gun dropped to the ground Again the tears filled her eyes She knew that he was waiting for her She'd hold him again in time All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep [This message has been edited by Jeffrey Carter (edited 06-19-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a story you've woven Jeffrey! Sad, and at the same time, thought-provoking. Reminds me to "think before we speak". Good choice for the book submission Jeffrey! Best wishes, /Kit |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Jeffrey~ Great messages in this Love your poetry  Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Jeffrey~ I was captivated by this, an amazing tale that you have woven here. I imagine that most of us have thought after an argument and someone leaves that "what if...." but it is so hard to treat everyday and every moment as if it were your last~ A beautiful message of hope and memory at the end as well knowing that one moment of anger does not replace all the many words of love. Thank you so much for sharing this~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Jeffrey,...I literally have goosebumps right now. Wow,...this is such a touching and moving piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing it. Take care. *Peace. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Jeff~ Beautiful! i am completely moved by this piece! so many times in life we wonder "what if"...thank you for reminding us all that even though we part from one another in life...we do see one another again. Hugs my friend Take care, Amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Jeffrey, this is fantastic piece of work... I am moved by the images you have woven here in this tale... Regards, sudhir |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
oh this was beautiful, and poignant. Lovely, lovely work jeffrey ~Heather |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh this was beautiful! Every time I'm mad at someone I think before I speak and this story is exactly why. You always have to think to yourself, "what if these are the last words this person hears from me?". Thank you for writing and sharing this wonderful piece. --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Jeffrey, Excellent work my friend. I loved it!!! Very powerful and moving. I could not stop reading if I wanted to. I was captivated. Wonderful. I know...tomorrow is a brighter day. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
I want to thank all who read and replied to this. I hope we all can learn a lesson from this story All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this moved to a strong ending. I like it Kathleen "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. I love thee to the depth and breadth and height My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Very different for you Jeff. It just shows the versatility and talents of your writing. Well done a very touching subject. Marina It is blessing to have wings for your words, and ink to flow from pen. Marina Crossley |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Kathleen, Glad you liked it Marina, Oh, man, Thank you for such high praise  All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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sleepless Junior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 13 |
I really don't know what to say, I'm kinda new at this. But, you really got something there. If only one person who is going through that situation could read your poem, it might make them stop and think. that would be wonderful thing. good job!!!!!!!! s |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Thank you sleepless and may I offer you a warm welcome to the passions family I think you will love it here as much as I do All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Very chilling.....but good message I was too captivated,,,,GREAT work...  Julie :) |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great message, great poem, Jeffrey! Denise |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Julieann and Denise, Thank you for the wonderful compliments, they are greatly appreciated All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
I do love this style of writing! A moment in time and the thoughts within it. It grabbed me immediately and held me through the wonderful ending. Very nice... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Jeffrey, this is a good poem with a message that needs to be heard.  |
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