Open Poetry #8 |
My Poet Friend |
Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
My Poet Friend My words are clumsy In their quest for clarity A mere souvenir - I’m aware, Still a wish to be given. Hurting, I can feel you - Knocked down repeatedly Getting up must seem Hardly worth the bother. Still, comfort is proffered These aims steeped in honor Like black Chinese tea. I won’t end this with honey, Dripping sunshiny smiles Or draw hearts over the i In my name. Only friendship is served Upon this plain white table dressed in purity. © 2000 Corinne Bailey |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Corinne, This was great!! Only a true friend would be there to pick you up when you have fallen or life has knocked you down. Wonderful writing. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
I agree with Lone Wolf here... Wonderful indeed!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful, Corinne! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ This is pure word art. 'Still, comfort is proffered These aims steeped in honor Like black Chinese tea.' What a true friendship you give when you give of yourself. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Wonderful heart given words, from a lovely poet, and a lovely way to express them. Your friend will know that. Parker |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Still, comfort is proffered These aims steeped in honor Like black Chinese tea. I won’t end this with honey, Dripping sunshiny smiles Or draw hearts over the i In my name. Only friendship is served Upon this plain white table dressed in purity. .... a great visual you have provided starting from black chinese tea to white table dressed... the hint at the purity of friendship with the colour and the resounding last word is excellent... but what tripped me was the drawing of hearts over the "i" in Corinne... I later realised that this is also the central letter in your name, and to most people would be the central word in their life... WOW and I am in space bt what MArge says as your Word Art... Thanks for this delightful sunday morning present for me... regards, sudhir. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lone Wolf, thank you, it's a fine line being friends with those of the opposite sex, and I wanted this person to clearly see that I don't pose a threat in any other capacity. Thank you, Toddles and Martie! Marge, you are too kind, but then, you are a very kind hearted person!Yeah, I do tend to be one of those doggedly faithful friends (must be the Taurus in me). Scares most people away! LOL Parker, thank you, sweet poet. I hope he understands, it's awkward communicating online sometimes, expressing without the intonations being heard, ya know? Sudhir, made my day, you did! Corinne |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Such genuine thoughts and feelings flow through your words in this Corrine! I very much enjoyed this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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