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My Lady (Book Submission)
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My Lady (Book Submission) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
My LadyIt's far away from Friday in the nearness of her eyes Now she's laughing running dancing through the meadows Her memory's brought her back and for this day her sorrow dies as she flies again with songs of sonnet's sparrows Her feet are finding steps she thought they'd long ago forgot and her chest is filling deep with sea and clover Her dampened dress is flying, sheer white cotton for her wings and the fiddle, flute and whistle are her lovers Her suffering has no place beside the heathers and the sea so it stays behind and cannot call to claim her while my lady, free to frolic through her moorland memories lives and loves again where no one dares to tame her |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
as always, Meadowmuse, this is superb writing ... book material for sure ... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I'm not sure I understand it like I should but that hardly matters because the writing is superb....... "with songs of sonnet's sparrows." "Her dampened dress is flying, sheer white cotton for her wings and the fiddle, flute and whistle are her lovers." Little nuances of Billy Shakspeare style with overtones of present times of course.. Love it! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Gee I always forget that..the book..the book click....... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--such a mood you capture with your words...just lovely! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
M.A., naturally it would please me to have a poem in the book, if possible, but will have to wait and see. I certainly thank you for your positive response though. ethome, as a poetry reader, I rely on both my cognitive and emotional response to a poem to tell me whether or not I enjoy it. That you enjoyed this one enough to respond so favorably is my reward, as a writer. Thank you, sincerely. Martie, as always I thank you for taking time to deliver a smile with your sweet response. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Claire, What a wonderful choice... All the support that I can muster, you can have ...  regards, sudhir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When sorrow dies and and suffering cannot follow... your poem gives a few such glorious moments as it takes flight! Beautiful! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I love everything about this...and it did give me that cognitive response that you speak of...for a time I felt a freedom, inside...felt so good, I think I will go read it again... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I'm so glad the Lady was able to throw off her sorrow and once again experience the beauty and the freedom of life...James |
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Tallulah Junior Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 28 |
A most enjoyable read, it just flows nicely! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ You throw off the cloak of bindings to frolic the memoried shores ... beautifully done, dear lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Another one for the book. So beautifully you've written this in flowing phrases. Your poetry is so delicate, yet powerful. Another amazing piece Liz |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Claire, Your poetry is always so delicate and yet powerful Another superb poem Liz |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Meadowmuse, You have done it again, great writing. More, more. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Awesome! This is my kind of poem. Thank you for sharing! My vote is cast, too. Corinne |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is lovely and touching, Claire! Wonderful! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Her feet are finding steps she thought they'd long ago forgot and her chest is filling deep with sea and clover Her dampened dress is flying, sheer white cotton for her wings and the fiddle, flute and whistle are her lovers =================== the imagery and poetic grace come from your god given gift ... the emotions can only come from living them.. "Her feet are finding steps she thought they'd long ago forgot" AND also living tru them ...in spite of them ...because of them ... you frolic divinely "My Lady"  cant help but smile when reading this one... take care sweet poet jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wonderful writing, Claire, but then, from you, I wouldn't expect less.... |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Such beauty flows from forth your pen fair lady... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sudhir, suthern, serenity, James, Tallulah, Marge, Liz (and Liz!), Bill, Corinne, Denise, Janet Marie, Balladeer, and Mike ~ It is difficult to know how to properly respond to everyone individually ... please know that I am grateful for and humbled by each word of your kind messages. Thank you all, in earnest, for this overwhelming encouragement. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
One word....or make that two........Beautiful "CLICK" |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Claire, Fine poetry as always. This one has a light and airy feel about it. A pleasure to read over again. Another vote here. fh |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Just beautiful!!! Thais deserves everyones vote......Loved it right from the start...  Julie :) |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Lovely Claire! So beautifully descriptive, just wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"with songs of sonnet's sparrows". . . Let the sun shine again in your meadow, gentle one There through the fields of heather, let your heart run Let joy and love once again fill your days Thank you for sharing with us in so many ways. . . Claire, there just aren't enough words for me to tell you how much I enjoy this. . . so I will just say. . . beautiful, absolutely beautiful. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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