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insect
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0 posted 2000-07-29 08:43 PM


    Adrift in this Love

    It is plain to see where you should be
    On a boat a drift at sea with me
    Dolphins swimming around
    Only a sea breeze of a sound

    Sipping tropical drinks with fruit
    Just tanning without your bathing suit
    I'll rub you with sun tan lotion
    Stroking by the waves of motion

    Only the sea you and me
    Soft music to set us free
    Cuddling at night when it's cold
    Adrift in this love till we grow old  




[This message has been edited by insect (edited 07-30-2000).]

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rosepetals25
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1 posted 2000-07-29 08:46 PM


Awwww    This is a sweet poem.  I like it  

                         rosepetals25

insect
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2 posted 2000-07-30 10:51 AM


rosepetals25…Thank you for responding!
                         I am happy you liked this poem and
                         thanks for the smiles. Here is some
                         for you.

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2000-07-30 11:02 AM


A drift in your words, I see beautiful, romantic words unfold. Very lovely Insect ... nicely penned!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

insect
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4 posted 2000-07-30 12:01 PM


Kit McCallum…Thank you
                            Shall we sail away with no direction to
                            whichever way our pens may lead. This
                            is for you Kit.

                            Your Ocean

                            The sea is a big place
                            In its waters I see your face
                            You are an ocean of grace
                            I weave these sails with a silk lace

                            The wind blows my thoughts to this pen
                            As I float through oceans again and again
                            These oceans full of life swim in you
                            Your ocean is the hand of all that's true

                             So true that life will sing
                             A life of songs of everything
                             Everything sings in the waves of motion
                             The motion of this pen in your ocean  

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
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5 posted 2000-07-30 12:09 PM


Enjoyed this piece, insect, ditto the other comments. One note..."a drift" should be all one word "adrift" which means "drifting" whereas "a drift" is referring to an object named "drift".  See what I mean?

Again, enjoyed this...

jwesley

insect
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6 posted 2000-07-30 12:43 PM


jwesley…Thanks for liking my poem!
                Thanks for your reply!

                 Just a note to show you care
                 Thanks my friend for this time to share
                 Reading poems and taking the time
                 To respond to poets for their rhyme

                 Rhymes of passion and rhymes so sad
                 Responding makes the poet feel glad
                 All the poets give thanks to you
                 A caring poet makes a poet true

                 Thank you

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