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On My Pond
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On My Pond |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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On my Pond On my pond mallards glide Dunking for tiny fishes, Mating of the dragonfly Fluttering neon wings - Random to my innate eye, Tracking nature’s patterns. Tune of a mocking bird chimes Opus, a sorrowful ballad, I resist the lure of the bulrushes Which would fill my earthen vase. At sunrise the calalillies unfurl, Stamens arousing the bumblebee Welcoming messenger of pollination. In all this perfection, a dirge Poised to destroy in its path - Nasty glassy-winged sharp shooter Stirring my maternal angst. Beneath the grape leaves he hides Pestilence of magnitude unknown, Reminder of the legendary locust As a biplane flies low overhead Dusting poison on water molecules. © 2000 Corinne Bailey |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
grrn. It was so nice at the begining and then took one helluva turn. Great poem and nice manipulation of your reader. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW Corrine what a change of atmosphere in the poem. Stunning stff. Wonderful poem. "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your reader is transported to your pond with you, quickly comes to appreciate (through your engaging depiction) Nature's truest treasures and then with your sudden, deft turn of phrase shares the anger right along with you. This is wonderful writing, Corinne. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Beowolf, Brian and Meadowmuse, In nature both forces always at work. Corinne |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
How well you depict our inner moments... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thanks, Sunshine! Corinne |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Wow Corinne, this was awesome. Brought back treasured memories of a pond of my youth. Many thanks for that, Juls |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
This was just wonderful my friend. I just love the way you write. Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Juls! Park, feelin's mutual, my friend! Corinne |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Corinne....what beautiful pictures you paint. I would be the scum on your pond any day  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Ah Corinne, this is a special one.... I am not going to spend my energy describing how beautiful this read to me for I will spend the rest of the day explaining that and still not be satisfied.... you must have got the idea... regards, sudhir. |
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