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I Speak Of Dreaming
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I Speak Of Dreaming |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England 
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I Speak Of Dreaming I speak of dreaming Lying silent in the night Breathing softly in Breathing softly out I watch you as you sleep Wishing many things I speak of wishing Lying softly in the dark Turning gently left Turning gently right I breathe you as you sleep Hoping many things I speak of hoping Lying lonely in the moonlight Wanting isn't good Wanting isn't right I yearn as you sleep Longing for many things |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
This is a really awesome poem with an awesome idea attached to it. Great job. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"I breathe you as you sleep." awesome--I really liked your poem alot, Marsha! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I watch you as you sleep ... I breathe you as you sleep ... I yearn as you sleep ...... Marsha, this is nice flowing poetry... lovely... regards, sudhir |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Marsha* This had a soft and quiet with a hint of a tear....wonderful writing~ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Thank you Xnonox this is a bit of a change from my ordinary poems, glad you liked it  Serenity, you are too kind, but so happy that it sounds right!  Sudhir thanks very much, did I get the flow right though? Butterflies don't the hint came through, good! I always find the poets in this group so helpful, and you know how much I admire your particular work. So praise from you is praise indeed! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
oooh marsha..i DO LOVE THIS!! it has a ...longing feeling about it..it sounds rather content at the beginning, then by the end..a bit restless..is that what you meant by it? i love it lots..this is as good as "picasso" ever did  please submit this for the book! i want to chk the 'yes' box  dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dee, Picasso, the guy who lived in the next village to Pablo yes! That's exactly right though, it's about how just as you start to sleep your head starts to work!  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sorry Dee love I didn't check the box because I'm out of time! Still it wouldn't be good enough, honestly, you and the real poets here are far too kind! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
marsha..this IS really good! what--you think i'm lying?? picasso the painter, you nut..you labled ME a bit of a PICASSO..i was saying, this is as good as anything ive written that you may think is so wonderful keep writing!! dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
PS..i just read last nite that theyre not taking any more submissions for the book..now is just voting time til aug 8..but i wish youd have submitted this one! ... dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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