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skarmageddon New Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 6Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
mechanical tears run down that little dimple in your cheek as you cry for what has gone not even gone, but it has maybe rejected your existence and you can't take it My God! you aren't perfect and you can't take it but don't grab the rope the knife, the pills just yet go for what you can't have and fail some more this is your therapy for real life now you look down on me because i know your secret i know the truth about you your fears your little locket of demons self conscienceness isn't the end of the world just a happy little garden in the soil of your world and p.s. now its ok to grab the rope the knife, the pills |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
P.S. ...WOW...so intense... never say never |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to passions. I completely disagree with the last line of your poem. It's not ok to grab the rope, the knife, the pills! We have a policy of non-glorification of suicide here and though your poem skirts the issue, it still 'suggests' that there is an easy way out. |
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MysticalAngel Junior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 23 |
I think it was a wonderful poem! Really deep! Keep writing! Ur poems are still better than mine!!! Talk to ur sexy ass later.... Carissa ** If something is too good to be true... 9 times out of 10 it is ** |
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