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The Wooden Bridge - Part 2
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The Wooden Bridge - Part 2 |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Wooden Bridge Part II (You must read Part 1 first) He stood there in his casual way On the old wood bridge from long ago I well remember our last day We parted, though I loved him so He watched the waters gushing by As just below they swirled and churned Then suddenly without a sign He raised his head and slowly turned He looked my way and I could see A face that’s been fixed in my mind A face that was a part of me A face I thought I’d never find I’m sure he recognized me there He stared, but with a saddened face Perhaps it was too much to bear The memories of that lovely place There is no other place I know As beautiful and so serene And there he stood above the falls Surrounded by plush summer green He looked as though he wanted me To join him on the wooden bridge But then he turned away from me And walked across to the wooded ridge That was the path we always took Along the ridge and then we’d seek A way to jump onto a boulder In the middle of the creek And so I followed in his path As I had done so many times And then defying waters wrath Onto the boulders we would climb He never turned to look my way He kept on going and never stopped Until he found an easy way And climbed upon a granite rock With water gushing wildly Between the ancient giant stones He made his way precariously Until he reached our very own It was a special place we’d sit In the middle of a raging stream And now I well remember it As though I’d seen it in a dream He knew that he was not alone But didn’t speak til I sat down Beside him on a giant stone In the stream beside this charming town I never spoke a single word I sat and listened to his tale He told the story I had heard Of all the oceans he had sailed He said he traveled round the world And that he never loved again He couldn’t find another girl And he would love me till the end He gazed into the sparkling stream And with a tear upon his cheek He asked what happened to our dream In the middle of the churning creek What made me slip and fall that day Into the falls cascading down That was the day, the fateful day That two young lovers left this town Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-26-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
And this .... even more. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Yeah, just read part I and this combines fabulously too.... Liz, make it doubly astounding work... regards, sudhir P.S. I copy-pasted on my notepad and read them together.... and it was wonderful all the way along... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
LIZ!!!!!---oh so glad there was a part 2. You have penned a superb vision and tale. This is so captivating and I am w/ Sudhir. When you read them together all at once,... WOW |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I for one am so glad that I....."begged" for more  Took my breath away.....Thank you sovery much for continuing the tale~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you , my dear poet friends. I only wrote a seond part because you asked. I thought Part 1 was it. Thanks for your enthusiastic responses Liz |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
lovely, Elizabeth. And you simply must read The Notebook. I'm certain you will love it, but take along a box of tissues. Corinne |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful Elizabeth what a perfect carry over from the first. Just excellent! So well penned as usual....ethome.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, What an ending. Beautiful Sy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Corrine, Ethome and Sy It was an unexpected ending for me, too. Thank you for your kind remarks Liz |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Elizabeth, This was a perfect ending to part one. I enjoyed it a lot. I can still see them there. Beautiful images. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Captivating read, Elizabeth! Denise |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Applause!!! Bravo ... phew, thank you Liz! What a beautiful ending to a wonderful story. Had me right there in the midst of it. Much loved this I did! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all for your comments. Glad you liked the ending. Liz |
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