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The Wooden Bridge - Part 1
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The Wooden Bridge - Part 1 |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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The Wooden Bridge Was it the charm of that old place That led me to go back again So picturesque and full of grace The village I had cherished then Or was it memories of a love That summer in the prime of youth That takes me back to visions of A love I knew to be the truth We parted ways so long ago Would he recall my face or name? I think that I would surely know His face that must have stayed the same But he’s not there, he left that place They say he went across the sea And no one ever saw his face From when we parted company I don’t know why, it must be fate It must be just a fantasy That I would want to celebrate This old town’s anniversary People came for many days To join the laughter, fun and food But I was going there in a daze And rather in a pensive mood And there it was, so picturesque Between the mountain and the stream Among the pines still statuesque The little village stands serene Within the wooded mountain walls Celebrates the little town That overlooks cascading falls Which beckon eyes to wonder down It’s just the same as I recall Not one frame house is out of place And there behind them is the falls Where cooling waters swirl and race They plunge among the giant boulders Between the homes and wooded ridge And though it’s thirty years the older There stands the little wooden bridge ‘Twas on that bridge we used to stand Above the wild churning stream The moonlit water wonderland That we would talk of future dreams It was that spot I came to see The bridge that stayed within my mind The place where love was part of me The part I ventured back to find As I descended toward the bridge My heart was beating fast within For though he was quite unaware I knew at once that it was him Down on the wooden bridge I glanced Though he was faced the other way I recognized his awkward stance As though it were just yesterday I stood and watched him gazing down As waters swirled and wildly churned Under the bridge beside the town Where love once lived and passion burned Then suddenly without a sign He raised his head and slowly turned Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-26-2000).] |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Liz~ This is wonderful! Oh, what majestic visions you do put into my heart and head! This is so lovely!  Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
another wonderful piece, ES ... superb imagery in this work ... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz---the imagery in this is superb and the story pure romance at its best!! (and then what happened?) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Elizabeth I love taking the trip from the first verse to the end in one of your poems. This one is no different. Wonderful weave of reminiscence and longing. I was totally captivated by the entire work... have a nice day.....ethome.. |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Another beauty Liz; such a lovely tale spun with your words. Bonnie |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You've got me holding my breath...for I have been at that bridge and saw the waterfall and would be the love... splendid, absolutely splendid! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I want more!!!!!!!!! This was fabulous!! I loved the story and the imagery....how absolutely perfect!!! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I'm with Martie--what happened next. This captured me good and I want more please.... not begging or nothing just on my knees.LOL |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Reminds me a bit of Bridges of Madison County, da sequel! Lovely imagery. Have you read "The Notebook?" by Nicholas Sparks? Corinne |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I have grown into the habit of "saving you for last"--smiles, you tell wondrous stories, another perfect pen, Elizabeth! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
THank you all for your wonderful comments. I don't know what happened because the poem ended. But the scene of this poem is very real and beautiful, a place I go often. No, I have not read the Notebook, but now you've got me curious, Corinne. Thanks Liz |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh ... the suspense!!! Not fair ... Part 2 pretty please??? Loved this Liz! Best wishes, /Kit |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Elizabeth~ This has left me breathless. Awesome piece of work and the imagery just perfect...well done Love Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Kit, How about if you write Part II to this poem, and then I'll write Part III. Deal? Tracie THanks , you are very kind Liz |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
romantic and poetic, and flows beautiful before the eyes as it touches the heart.... thanks... jwesley |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Elizabeth, What a wonderful story you have told. The picture seems so real, it is as if the images jump to life right from the screen. Soft and romantic writing. Loved it. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I could picture it all in my mind as if I were there with you, Elizabeth! Excellent! Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Wonder upon wonder you never cease to amaze me. Sy |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I don't know how you do it Elizabeth...very good work. I really enjoyed this one. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all And thus, Part 2 Liz |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ Enjoyed this muchly. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is picturesque indeed!!! Liz, Astounding work... regards, sudhir |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you all. So many requests for a continuation, I was forced to write Part 2. Your comments are all so kind. I hope you like the second part Liz |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
One of those poems I would like to live and experience...James |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thank you, James, but perhaps not after you read Part 2 Thanks for your comments Liz |
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