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Blunt Knife...Happy Ending
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Blunt Knife...Happy Ending |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Do I reflect a mourner stressed Mascara stains and tailored dress Do I reflect a mourner strained With football scores and addled brain Do I appear contemplative mind That’s me in the coffin so be kind I love the tasteful cut of gown They chose to face my arms wrist down Do they know I can hear them bleat …must pay the bank…what will we eat I hope the sermons not long winded Who am I to be offended Now the line around the casket Some the horror better mask it Others run out from this place The death grin upon my face |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
I've been waiting for a new poem from you. And it was well worth the wait. I loved the irony. Great peom. The last line was wonderful. Just an effigy to be disgraced, to be defaced. Your need for me has been replaced. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
OH YUH.....The death grin upon my face that's how I want to go!! Great work oh sleepless one  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Does make ya wonder if there's any dimension of awareness from the other side, doesn't it?? Interesting work, walt... weird - wayout - and interesting...  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
the last line seems the one doing the trick... but for me the first four line have capture my imagination to the hilt drawing me in, sucking me into the coffin with the air around... and ..... in a few words, very captivating and way too deep... Excellent work, Walt, my friend, regards, sudhir |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
What a distinctive point of view...good telling, Walt. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow---walt...you really full of surprises and I don't know why I should find that surprising...grin..like this much..."do they know that I can hear them bleating..." yep... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx all for replyin to this it means alot |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Walt that's one heck of a title and I can't find any reason not to say I'm glad that blunt knife did'nt take you away. It was great travelling into your future like that all the same. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
All I can say is Whoa!!!!!! Corinne |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx e and Corinne i thank yuhs muchly |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ What a perspective ! In spite of it all .... I'm grinning !  *I sent flowers. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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