Open Poetry #8 |
>>>>>>Ringless<<<<<< |
Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
You know I just realized today... There is something that I need to say... I just locked it inside every day... and I really have tried things your way... But I can't deny what is true... and the fact is that I don't love you... We have memories of things we once knew... and I really feel sad that it's through...... But I think that the time...has it come? To tell you I'm going away... I know you won't notice...no, you won't look at me.. And you don't hear a word that I say... You'd rather just watch your tv... Then spend your sweet time here with me... You don't seem to know who I am... So, Baby, I took your ring off my hand... I know that the time has now come... To take myself right out the door... And when I look at you, I know that it's true... That I just can't love you, anymore... You have made it so perfectly clear... That you don't even know that I'm here... So I'm making my one-time last stand... Baby, I took your ring off my hand... This hand is now ringless, and it's so plain to see There's a mark on my finger, where your ring used to be... Each time that I look there, my heart breaks inside, Because I wouldn't be ringless, If you only.. had.. tried... Love received is equal to love given! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Heartfelt sorrow for you girl. It is never easy to walk away when you have given so much of yourself and have nothing to show in the end. Beautiful writing. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Mark.... Thank you for your kind words.... This is always a hard subject, but too familiar to too many people!! Love received is equal to love given! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You have perfectly described a situation I went thru not so long ago...When I removed my ring the mark was so prominant...when I would meet women they would say to me it was obvious that I had just removed my ring for the evening...I said no really its been off for a long time...about nine months have passed and I still believe I can see that ring mark...I thought when it is gone that is the day a new love will begin..the time has arrived or is very close...James |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
heartfelt. simply stunning.a sad way to end a relationship. Sincerely A_L |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
very sad poem Sunny ... hope it all works out for you |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
James... It does take a while for that mark to go away, but the best part is when you meet the right one, and put on a new ring!! (One that will stay there!) Thank you for reading, and I wish you only the best! A_L...Thank you for liking this, and I remember someone telling me once that one door has to close before you can open another... Rex...You're a good-hearted friend, and I thank you for reading and caring!! Love received is equal to love given! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Sunny, Goodness, goodness, goodness, I am so very touched by this one that a tear welled in my eye. YOu are good, and the tender emotions that you have must be incredible for you to write like this. This definitly has my vote. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Bill.... Thank you for your vote!!! I forgot to say that this one is meant for my ex......he had a way of bringing out certain emotions!! Ha!! I appreciate your reading this and your reply.......means a lot! Love received is equal to love given! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Sonny, loved this, brought back some old pain. Nice read. Voted. Parker |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Wow, what a strong powerful subject, one usualy avoided, i am glad you expressed it though as it is becoming more and more common and a lot of people can relate to it - even if they havn't been married, the message is still the same . I loved it . L.of.L. Tom . Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Parker....I hope it didn't bring back too much pain... Tom....Yeah, I agree......whether you're married or not, it's still something we all have in common...... Thank you both for reading!! Love received is equal to love given! |
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