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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Still MomentsThis morning, stopping just at the mudroom door blinking through the dancing speckles of sun I am taken to the warm doorway of Grandmother's house, where I would stand for still moments, my palms pressed upon the calming wood, my breath coming slowly, the glass unfogged, the heat of the August morning rising in ripples above the blacktop road, watching for the front of Mama's car. |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
there's something to be said for brevity ... i think you've said it here ... impact ... that's what i look for in a piece ... do you like to do collaborative work? My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very descriptive, Claire. Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Images jump out always from your delightful poems... and so does the flow always make it into a very enjoyable read... Claire, As always, I am glad to have read another poem from you... Just Lovely! regards, sudhir |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Claire~ This is just beautiful! Such wonderful imagery and emotion! I love it!  Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
M.A. thank you for your kind commentary. Free verse is not my customary style of writing, but this seemed to lend itself to the format. As for collaboration, I've written fiction with a co~author but have had little experience co~authoring poetry. Feel free to e'mail me. Elizabeth, thank you for reading! Sudhir, thank you so for your thoughtful response! Terry, such enthusiastic words from you have brightened my day...thank you! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--I love the picture that this brought to my mind...such a blessed captured moment ..and so perfectly expressed the memory! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
It's amazing how the wonderful computer of the mind will bring back events or scenes from the past like a flash and leave them in the mind's ram to contemplate so sweetly. This is excellent free verse...as much a part of an art form as any.....I could visualize you with your palms against Grandma's door looking for Mom's car...Great work |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
I have to echo Martie here...Such images it brought to mind, and memories of another time and place. Simply beautiful. Bonnie |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
ahhh the sweet innocense of the child. Great creation here and the flow is superb. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
claire, you do this so well...you've got a remarkable talent...I am a fan... |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
very smooth read...and simply stated and I loved the images..we are thinking of "grandma's" these past few days thanks to ethome...he brought back my memories ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Claire, beautifully vivid. Magical "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie, thanks. Isn't it peculiar how something as simple as the feeling of approaching a warm door can bring memories? ethome, yes, I believe it is amazing how that can be! Thank you for reading this today. Bonnie, thank you for your sweet response. Memories are powerful events, aren't they? Mark, I thank you for the "superb"... very nice of you to let me know you enjoyed it. serenity, I am very flattered ~ thank you sincerely. MMoonchild, yes, thoughts of Grandmothers are plentiful, of late, to be sure. Thank you for your kind response. Brian, thank you! Your "magical" made my evening. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Such a tender and mystical vision Claire ... beautifully described ... I could feel the sunlight's warmth through the words as you took me back. Loved this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Wonderful imagery..you've done well Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
They are precious aren't they Claire?? Wonderful as always my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Toddles Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 396New Orleans, Louisiana |
Meadowmuse: I really like your style and I can't wait to read your next post, nice wordology! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Kit, thank you. One of the most fruitful results of sharing a poem is to know that the reader has "felt" it. You have made my day! Tracie, thank you kindly for your enthusiasm. (and for reading, of course!) Sven, yes, memories can be precious...and that we even have the capability to store such minute details in our minds is, well ~ mindboggling! Thanks for reading, my friend. Toddles, thank you, sincerely. I don't have as much time to write as I used to, but it's something I do enjoy. So nice of you to let me know you enjoyed this. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Gosh, you're good Claire! Reading this is like standing there with you. fh |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
memories...sigh |
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