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T McCoy
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since 2000-07-24

Posts 186

0 posted 2000-07-25 03:19 AM

                 EYES WIDE SHUT

     I'm in my room
          it's 4 a.m.
     You're not here
          so I can't win
     Wanna close my eyes
          and pretend
     But what if I can't
          open them again?

     Maybe I wouldn't be so sad
          if I cared enough
          to get mad
     At all the things that I can change
          instead of all the things
          I can't even rearrange...

     I guess I need someone
          to ***** me out
     To keep me alive and
          wear me down
     Someone who can look at me
          and see all the things
          that only you can see...


             (chorus)

                 If you turn me on
                 I will tune me out
                 If you make me real
                 I will make you proud
                 Re-define my reality
                 And mold me back to
                 Who we used to be...

     I'm in my room
          it's 6 a.m.
     The sun comes up
          it starts again
     Am I too blind
          to even see
     The fire that burns
          inside of me
     When you are here
          and we are we
     And everything is how it's meant to be...

     I have found some sanctity
     I close my eyes and you're here with me
     Your smiling face my victory
     I'll stay like this eternally
     With eyes wide shut
     I'm so locked in
     And I don't think I can open them again...

[This message has been edited by T McCoy (edited 07-27-2000).]

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2000-07-25 03:38 AM

awesome....welcome, and I am looking forward to reading more...

rosepetals25

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since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

2 posted 2000-07-25 04:11 AM

I like this poem... a strong show of emotion. I like the fourth verse the best. Well done and welcome to Passions.

rosepetals25

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

3 posted 2000-07-25 08:53 AM

Welcome To Passions! This was a very powerful
piece...so many churning emotions within the lines,
a great entrance, looking forward to reading many
more~

[This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 07-25-2000).]

MMoonchild
Senior Member

since 2000-07-13

Posts 1715
PA

4 posted 2000-07-25 10:58 AM

well this was an intense one...just keep those eyes open...and maybe you will be surprised at what you find
~~softly
Maureen

T McCoy
Member

since 2000-07-24

Posts 186

5 posted 2000-07-25 04:29 PM

   serenity...geez,  i don't know what to say
   to that except thanks...so glad you liked
   it...
   rosepetals25...i actually wrote this to
   put to music with the fourth verse as
   the chorus...guess that should tell me
   something.  Thank you.
   butterflies...thank you.  The great
   entrance is the welcome I have recieved.
   Maureen...they're open again now but I
   hear you sister.  Thanks.

   Tony

Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

6 posted 2000-07-25 04:42 PM

welcome stranger ... nice work ... can't wait to see more ( perhaps some prose as well )

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

7 posted 2000-07-25 06:48 PM

Welcome To Passions. This was one power packed piece you have started with. Looking forward to more.

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2000-07-25 07:04 PM

Welcome to Passions...You have written and emotionally strong poem...look forward to more.

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

9 posted 2000-07-25 07:39 PM

WOW

welcome~
That is soo beautiful...well done
Tracie~

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Marina
Member Elite

since 2000-02-10

Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario

10 posted 2000-07-25 11:19 PM

Welcome to Passions!!!!

Look forward to reading more of your work!

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley

Parker
Member Elite

since 2000-01-06

Posts 3129
ON

11 posted 2000-07-26 01:58 PM

great read, wellcome to the funny farm, where life is beautiful....
they'll be coming to take you away hahahehe
they'll be coming to take you away hahahehe

Parker

T McCoy
Member

since 2000-07-24

Posts 186

12 posted 2000-07-26 02:27 PM

again a sincere thanks to all....
Parker...they can't take me away, man...
I'm already gone! hahahehe
Tony

JulieAnn
Senior Member

since 2000-06-12

Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!

13 posted 2000-07-30 04:49 PM

Well here I am reading your wonderful writing at last.....Very Good!! I could almost hear the tune in my head....Reminded me a bit like MB20..(one of my favorite bands).....Liked it a lot!!! Oh and welcome to passions it really is a great site....sorry it took me so long to welcome you...such is life....actually after reading this I am sorry I didn't read it sooner...Look forward to reading more of your writing soon....

Julie :)

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