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Mike
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0 posted 2000-07-25 12:11 PM



Leave not a stone
to mark this site,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.
Witness not pain's pantomime,
unwanted pallor
lost in sands of shifting time,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt.
Trailing brambles, cormorants,
as starving beggar, mendicants,
who stand before
all that I covet,
never looking, never seeing,
no light from forth heaven's sky
illuminates,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.
Upon hot breathless wind,
beyond a dying sun,
knowing not
if day is done.
Pillared forest aisles
devoid of burning beaker
pouring forth of Sol,
heeding not of sorrow's call,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt.
Spanning breadth
of river's depth,
Bridging not
words yet unwritten,
unknown sounds by sorrow bitten,
for I have felt,
yes, I have felt of sorrow's bite.

© Copyright 2000 Mike - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2000-07-25 12:29 PM


Mike--Your vision with words here is amazing...so strong and intelligent and powerful---so dark an brooding and sad. I'm glad to see you back.  
Meadowmuse
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2 posted 2000-07-25 12:35 PM


"Bridging not
words yet unwritten,
unknown sounds by sorrow bitten,"

Mournful, lyrical, "feeling" poetry. Thank you for this.

~ Claire


Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


serenity blaze
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3 posted 2000-07-25 12:37 PM


This is poignant and almost surreal in its visuals...I wish I knew how to read better for this one...but I do think it beautiful...reminds me of a tarot card, in fact...lol...(Five of cups)
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2000-07-25 12:56 PM


Mike~
I greatly enjoyed reading this several times.
I get the feeling that it fell from you
in a rush of emotion ... very heart-felt.

Powerful stuff !

~*Marge*~



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wayoutwalt
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5 posted 2000-07-25 12:57 PM


mike geez louise i love this as i always love yur work

"Amadeus Amadeus. Amadeus. Amadeus Amadeus. Amadeus. Am Am Amadeus. Come on and rock me Amadeus!"-Falco
"don't even lissen to classical music!"-me

Mike
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6 posted 2000-07-25 09:39 AM


Martie, I'm now sure why you wanted to see my back...er... sorry... (hehe)  thank you for the very gracious comment.
Claire-  leave it to you to pick out my favorite line... and thank you very much my poetic friend.
serenity-  I have no idea what a five of cups is...*smile*  but I do appreciate the kind reply... thanks.
Marge-as one who always writes from her heart and soul of her spirit...thank you oh so much.
Walt_  how the heck did you know my middle name was Louise?  sheesh...  glad you enjoyed as I always do your poetry.

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
7 posted 2000-07-25 09:22 PM


A departure for you, but a wonderful poem nonetheless. I do so enjoy ALL your work.  
Denise
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8 posted 2000-07-25 09:26 PM


Excellent portrayal of sorrow, Mike. Very well written.

Denise

Honeybee
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9 posted 2001-08-02 04:31 PM



I feel your pain in this and can relate on many levels.  Your writing is amazing~

Melissa~

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