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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Exposed I’ve walked around cloaked in a blanket To protect myself from the wind Then my poetry gently unwrapped it And exposed all my feelings within I walked with a veil draped upon me To protect my eyes from the sun But my poetry blew it away The sheer masquerade was undone I walked with a pair of old boots So my tracks would be awkward and fake Then my poems described them so well Now you know what direction I take The picture was slowly uncovered My essence exposed from the start For the words that I put down on paper Were not from my mind, but my heart My passion, my love and my spirit Religion, and sorrow and guilt Love of nature and family and children Are all woven into the quilt The words have unraveled my sorrows And given new light to my fears My poetry sings out my happiness And events of my life through the years Old wounds of the passed have now surfaced And plants of the seeds I had sown My own words have led to fulfillment And a peace that to me was unknown My poetry tells the whole story Told better than anyone can And my heart has been filled with contentment For I finally found out who I am Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-23-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I thank God daily that he took the time to show us you...this, perhaps, will be one of the most favored of all your poems...I am honored to tell you so...and may I add, it should be bookmarked for Voices I or II or III...I don't care, as long as the world has a chance to see it!< !signature--> Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 07-23-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah yes Elizabeth leave it to the workings of poetry to expose us all. When we open the heart we cannot hide. Like it says in the Bible, "out of the heart's abundance the mouth speaks." If it's in there then it is going to be hard to contain forever. You have described it so well in this poem, the truth shall set you free if you write it down from the heart. Best of all I love the kicker at the end. "For I finally found out who I am." That's the hardest thing to do....be honest with yourself. Great writing as usual Elizabeth I thoroughly enjoyed the read. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Simply masterful Liz... just masterful. You have an amazing command over words. 'My passion, my love and my spirit Religion, and sorrow and guilt Love of nature and family and children Are all woven into the quilt' wow  K |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and I am so glad, Elizabeth...your poetry is perfection...thank you for sharing it and yourself... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
MASTERPIECE!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--I think we are all afraid to expose are Vulnerable underbelly, but when we do, we see how lovely is the strength of this fragility. You have won many hearts with your poetry, most of all, your own. I LOVE THIS POEM! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, A masterful piece of work. God bless Sy |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I’ve walked around cloaked in a blanket To protect myself from the wind Then my poetry gently unwrapped it And exposed all my feelings within I walked with a veil draped upon me To protect my eyes from the sun But my poetry blew it away The sheer masquerade was undone I walked with a pair of old boots So my tracks would be awkward and fake Then my poems described them so well Now you know what direction I take The picture was slowly uncovered My essence exposed from the start For the words that I put down on paper Were not from my mind, but my heart ================================ Old wounds of the passed have now surfaced And plants of the seeds I had sown My own words have led to fulfillment And a peace that to me was unknown My poetry tells the whole story Told better than anyone can And my heart has been filled with contentment For I finally found out who I am ==================== Liz.... I will TRY to contain my self while telling you how AMAZING this poem is... (but i make no promises)  I got gooebumps when i read it...by the second verse... i dont even know if i have the words to do it justice...or to tell you how if affected me I have a half written poem that I can not find the words to express or release the emotions i feel about my poetry and writing, as well as reading others... and then i find this jewel.. you have written every poets heart here I felt this poem... the ONLY thing wrong is that I didnt write it and that I cant vote for it a 1000 times. this belongs in EVERY poetry book thank you for sharing your grace with us love you sweet poet jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Michael Auguste Junior Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 12USA |
Elizabeth, This is a true work of art. I loved each and every word. It is one of the best you've ever written. Michael Auguste |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
well ... you earned a vote with this one Elizabeth ... we sure can learn a lot about ourselves though our poetry Beautifully written love it Rex |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Smiling here Elizabeth ... I think you're in my head! I just loved this one sooooooo much. I affectionately call what you've described in this perfect poem, as "my therapy of the pen", and don't know how I could have coped without it either Liz. Absolutely beautiful words to describe these poetic thoughts and feelings!Take care, best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 07-23-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
And your poetry is as lovely as you are, Elizabeth! Denise ...oops, I was so caught up in the poem I forgot to vote the first time! Vote's in now! [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 07-23-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
THank you all so very much for your wonderful resonses to this poem. I truly believe that we do discover oourselves as we are writing Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
My poetry tells the whole story Told better than anyone can And my heart has been filled with contentment For I finally found out who I am ........ I walked or atleast so, I thought, Or maybe my thoughts walked with me, I wrote the wandering musings I thought Ha! I had walked my thoughts for free! Soon my steps may have become leaps, and my walk would have become a story, I only hope that when this body sleeps, I will have walked my walk in history. .......... Liz, You have a fantastic poem... how I wish I had written the words I read in you poem... regards, sudhir |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wonderful little verse in your response, Suhir, I wish I had written it. Thank you for your kind comments Liz |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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