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In Velvet Silence
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In Velvet Silence |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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In Velvet Silence It came to me so softly felt In velvet silence slowly crept Just like a rose’s thorn it dealt A wound of pleasure as I slept So unaware, the potent quill Approached my being undisguised And made its way into my heart A force I didn’t recognize Uninvited was the passion Unexpected was the feel Love never asked if it was welcome Nor revealed if it was real In only days my heart deciphered What I felt and what I knew That this was meant to be a life Of love known only to a few Through the years, the thorn still lingers In my heart where it was placed But also love and memories With velvet silent songs are laced Elizabeth Santos |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Elizabeth..... I always marvel at your work... It flows so smoothly, and is quite beautiful in the phrasing... Thank you for this one... ~~~~~~~~~~Never~~~~~~~~~~ say ~~~~~~~~~~Never~~~~~~~~~~ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Liz: Here I am, posting a small reply to another poet and up you come talking to my heart, putting into words what I somehow fail to do....*shakes her head* I hope all of us, after the hurt subsides, can reflect on the happiness that your poem reminded me of, little way to go here but I'm getting there, I have decreed it and so it will be.. I swear you're in my dreams, sitting there, telling me, that I was not a fool. HUSG |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Uninvited was the passion Unexpected was the feel Love never asked if it was welcome Nor revealed if it was real In only days my heart deciphered What I felt and what I knew That this was meant to be a life Of love known only to a few Through the years, the thorn still lingers In my heart where it was placed But also love and memories With velvet silent songs are laced ================= OH Liz this is so lovely and well written.. so well conceived... those 3rd & 4th verses are so full of depth and emotion and beautiful title as well PERFECTION later-poetry-in motion-gator  jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dearest Liz; How romantic and lovely. Sigh!! Now I think I'll go give my wonderful husband a big hug! Love, Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A marvel in romantic muse. I really love it. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--I think the quill might have been a pen, for you have written so much love into poems like this one. Remarkable! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, You did it again, wonderful. Love Sy |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Liz, really beautiful a stunning poem. why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yep, you did it again!  Denise |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
Elizabeth, wow wow wow! Through the years, the thorn still lingers In my heart where it was placed But also love and memories With velvet silent songs are laced Perfect! You have remarkable talent. I loved every line, and the ending was perfect! Linda M |
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jefsand Junior Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 18 |
Wonderful poem! The lucky few! jefsand "... meant to be a life Of love known only to a few" |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This is so softly written and so lovely to read...lovely writings Elizabeth Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Elizabeth you've done it again. I never cease to be amazed to how you can carry the rhyme so completely tight through a work and yet use such great thought patterns to put the mood and emotions across. Great gift, you should be proud........ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
God, thank you for giving us Elizabeth and her gift of words. She is truly a treasure to us all. Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, I second Sunshine's comment! Stunning wording and emotions Elizabeth, such a beautiful flow ... and I just can't get over the way the last line just sings through my mind: "With velvet silent songs are laced" Beautiful Liz! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ And the 'Velvet Silence' laces such lovely memories. How we appreciate your sharing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Liz, You heart is sing again and your work is so beautiful, thanks Liz you always make me smile in side. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Love never asked if it was welcome Nor revealed if it was real loved the title, and all that followed thank you for sharing such wonderful thoughts ~~softly Maureen |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Lovely! Just too lovely for words to describe... regards, sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful |
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