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Please Let Me Close My Eyes
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Please Let Me Close My Eyes |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia 
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Please let me close my eyes For I am weary and disheartened I have traveled an endless distance To search out the meaning of life Countless doors have been closed in my face And leagues of strangers wash past me As if I were invisible A mere illusion at most And though I hear their many voices Not one sound can I capture For their thoughts are too fleeting I'd been warned that i would drown In a sea of confessions, lies, and misdeeds But I wanted to believe that I was stronger That I too could walk on water But after so many years Im soaked to the bone And the brilliance of wisdom no longer warms me And the only discovery i have made on my journey Is that im weary and disheartened Please let me close my eyes. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Oh how well I know this feeling...lost confuzed...dazed by lifes little twists...wonderful read never say never |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Life can be a mental struggle but, of all the qualities that mankind possesses love is the greatest and it cures all things. That love can be found, for without it there would be no morality and decency.....those nameless faces are all affected by the same constants However, your being tired and weary and wanting to close your eyes to escape, brought out of you an excellent poem, very tastefully done! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoutPrincess~ Have we not all felt this great line - 'I wanted to believe that I was stronger That I too could walk on water' At one time or another, I'm sure we have. Enjoyed the read.  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
thank you Paula, ethome, and Marge for taking the time to read and respond to my poem....i truly appreciate your comments |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
this was a very soft, mellow and touching read...most enjoyable, princess...(left off the pout as this was too nicely done..no pouting here) ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I'm sure that we all have felt that way. . . Excellent poem my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Ah, thank you both very much for you kind comments...no matter how weary the traveller, there is always a kind stranger somewhere to bring up his spirits! thank you again |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Pout....Sorry i havent replied to this sooner. Times slipping away from me...Loved this read..Keep it up 99~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Naturally we have all felt downtrodden, defeated, and exhausted, but you have indeed expressed it well here. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful images here that bring to life the feelings behind them. I know we have all been there at one time or another. Great writing. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I think we all need to hibernate from the world for a while just let ourselves slip into complete unawareness and peace. Next time close your eyes and the let the world vanish for a few hours while you fly free. A wonderfully written poem. "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know how you feel |
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