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Beth
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 468
WA, Australia

0 posted 2000-07-21 01:15 AM




I look at your daughter
every day,
And although she cant
talk yet,
When she does,
What do I say?.

Do I tell her that you use to
beat me to the ground,
And in that time I couldnt
make a sound.

That if I did you'd beat
me more,
Kick harder,
Cause more pain than
before.

That I couldnt go out with my
friends because of black eyes,
I'd have to wear alot of
make up,
Try and make a disguise.

That you hit me in my belly
with her in there,
Without even a flinch,
Without even a care.

That you pulled me by my
hair,
And made me crawl,
Which wasnt decent,
Which wasnt fair.

That you made my face bleed
and sting,
That you drilled into me
I couldnt call for help,
I had no-one to ring.

Teasing and taunting
And locking me in a room,
Sometimes coming in
And beating me with a batton or
broom.

Holding a knife to my throat,
And screaming in my face,
Making me hollow,
Feel like a discrace.

But no, Im not telling her any
of this,
You see,
I brought her into the world
to feel happy and bliss.

But, not to her, will you raise
a hand,
Thats when I front up
Ans take my stand.

I put up with it long enough,
You of all people
Should know it made me tough.

I want you to stay away for
good,
You should have treated us with
respect,
Like a real man would.


~I havent yet been able to come up with a title but I am open to suggestions~


[This message has been edited by Beth (edited 07-21-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Cherie - All Rights Reserved
Saunni
Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777
West Virginia
1 posted 2000-07-21 01:50 AM


Awww that was  sad...must be a hard situation. But, in the end, you got the greatest gift, your baby...very well written.

Sauni

Sauni :)

poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
2 posted 2000-07-21 02:03 AM


   I know how much you hurt...but you are a brave and strong woman, and when the time comes for courtney to ask those "daddy" questions...im sure that you will be able to answer them with eloquence,understanding,and honesty.
Youre my best bud Ree, and i love ya!
                  

[This message has been edited by poutprincess (edited 07-21-2000).]

Jaysun C
Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56

3 posted 2000-07-21 02:09 AM


this poem is so so so so sad
i had no idea what i was in for

some of the most powerfull words i have ever heard

it feels wierd to say i like something something that makes me so mad
but then i realize that it's what lays behind the words (black eyes) where the beauty of the writing is to be had


Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
4 posted 2000-07-21 02:36 AM


Hold on to that precious child and she will help you stay strong.  As for the poem it was well written and your seriousness came through loud and clear.  Great write about what I know must be a struggle with you every day.   a hug to mom and child
Beth
Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468
WA, Australia
5 posted 2000-07-21 02:54 AM


~Sauni, you are so very true. I was blessed with a healthy daughter. So, even after all he had done to me she still came into the world. Just goes to show ya what karma does..Thankyou kindly~

~Pout...Oh I am more than ready to answer those 'daddy' questions. Too bad she also calls you daddy cos thats gonna be hard to exlain (LOL)..Thanks~


~Jaysun...Thankyou deeply for your reply. Anger can be hard for someone living with it. Even thinking now, I cant beleive I let him get away with doing those things to me. Thank you again~

Lady Lost
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 470

6 posted 2000-07-21 09:13 AM


I am so sorry you had to go through that.  I pray that things will get better.  stay strong.

You can never have too much fiction; reality can be such a bore

ma miller
Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806

7 posted 2000-07-21 09:20 AM


Beth ... must have taken an enornous amount of inner strength to write this piece ... i admire your ability to focus what could be absolute negative energy and turn it to love and happiness for your child ...

title suggestions ...

"A Real Man Would"
"Tough"
"Take My Stand"
"For Just Respect"

thanks for sharing ..

MMoonchild
Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
PA
8 posted 2000-07-21 12:40 PM


I agree with MA, Beth  ..was thinking about  
Taking A Stand...
your words were very piercing...and I hope that everything is better for you and your child now
~~softly
Maureen

JulieAnn
Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
9 posted 2000-07-21 02:46 PM


Sorry i haven't been around to reply much lately.....This poem was very sad...no one deserves to be treated that way....he is not a man......he is a coward!!! You keep your chin up and take care of your daughter.....together the two of you can rise up and be strong.....excellent poem....brought tears to my eyes......

Julie :)



Bill Charles
Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
10 posted 2000-07-21 08:56 PM


Beth,
Whew, I certainly have some different emotions after reading this poem you have written. This is so powerful and I could feel your sorrow. Chin up Beth, the hurt does go away in time.

Perhaps a name for your poem:

        "Never Again"


Beth
Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468
WA, Australia
11 posted 2000-07-22 12:48 PM


~Mark, The struggle ended when I kicked him out the door...Thankyou dearly.~

~Lady Lost, I have a gained alot of strength from my past and also wisdom.It makes me a better person. Thankyou deeply~

~MA Miller, I didnt bring my daughter into the world to show her anything but love and happiness. Thankyou~

~Maureen, Things couldnt be better for us now. Thankyou very much~

~JulieAnn, You presence has been missed. Karma has come back on him for what he did to me and my daughter. He is now suffering the way he made us suffer. Thankyou so much~

~Bill, Im glad this poem brought you so many emotions. Its all a good thing to know ypur poetry hits the spot. Thankyou so much for your sweet reply~

Again thankyou to everyone for your kind replies...They are greatly appreciated

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