Open Poetry #8 |
A Memory |
spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
A Memory I hear the strokes of a heart confined I hear the echo in my mind I long to shed the bitter taste Of such a love that’s grown to waste Released from that which held me close Sent off to find what I need most A place to share this love so true No longer yours, misplaced by you So feed me not these gentle words Concealing that which makes me burn I’ll move on, still loving you And save this spot that makes me blue A piece of me, my heart will be There inside you to always see. A Memory [This message has been edited by spiked (edited 07-21-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is sad but beautiful...a true expression of your heart...I send ya hugs and smiles t'nite...be at peace, 'k? |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
tearfully beautiful... ~~softly Maureen |
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Jaysun C Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56 |
your memorie reminds me of a place i used to be not to long after she left me |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank You all so much. Memories can be like a double edge sword hurting and feeling good at the same time. Rich |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sad poem, but take heart in knowing that it does get better and love will come again. Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Released from that which held me close Sent off to find what I need most A place to share this love so true No longer yours, misplaced by you So feed me not these gentle words Concealing that which makes me burn I’ll move on, still loving you And save this spot that makes me blue A piece of me, my heart will be There inside you to always see. A Memory ==================== this is a very well written poem i really felt the emotions of it.. love the vocab choices you used to define it all very nice work here Mr S. take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you corinne JM We write as we speak so i appreciate the compliment on the vocab. lol Thanks Rich |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Spiked~ The recall of memories can be the sharpest pain ..... or the greatest joy at any given moment changing right before us. 'I’ll move on, still loving you And save this spot that makes me blue A piece of me, my heart will be There inside you to always see. A Memory' You've captured the memory well. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sad and heartbreaking but well done. I enjoyed the read so much..........Take care...............ethome...... |
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