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Cold and Alone
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Cold and Alone |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Cold, Alone ....void of life Taken, Used....turn the knife Tears of ice fall like rain Remove the power to cause me pain I’ll live here in the dark Remembrance my eternal spark Cold, Alone....void of life From your hands I take the knife Trust and love did once exist A second look I will resist Taken, Used .....left to cry Cold, Alone....the feelings die No more tears will spill today Closing eyes....you walk away Taken, Used....the knife was turned Heart to Stone....lesson learned |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
May I join you in a heartfelt cry? This is so sad to see one turn to shelter but I do understand the need to go. Wonderfully written. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
BDC A HUGE HUG. I wish their words I could say, to express how I feel about this poem but when reading something so raw I am left lost for words. All I want to do is rush to your side and ask "are you ok?" then give you a give hug. I only wish my arms could reach that far. anyway take care my friend, I hope the rays of light shine down soon until then love and concern, brian.  why must we pray screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
applauding here yuh i likes this lots it emotional very so |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tears of ice fall like rain Remove the power to cause me pain I’ll live here in the dark Remembrance my eternal spark Cold, Alone....void of life From your hands I take the knife Trust and love did once exist A second look I will resist ======================== No more tears will spill today Closing eyes....you walk away Taken, Used....the knife was turned Heart to Stone....lesson learned ========================== we learn the lessons of the heart the hard way...sometimes we learn them more than once...but in time we do learn from our- OR-their mistakes and we grow stronger and wiser with each tear... your poetry of late makes my point for me... written from that place deep with-in my SS and by writing it out... we let it out..let it go... You know....I know...hearts know time to go fly in the sunshine sweet butterfly  love ya JM There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Butterflies.... This was beautifully written and I felt the pain in your heart. It's so hard to watch love walk away... I do love your work so very much! ~~~~~Live for Today~~~~~ taste every single moment |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Butterflies_dont_cry, This is so touching and sad.. Butterflies are not suppose to be sad. All I could think of was wanting to help, but a hug is all I can send. A tear came down, even to my eyes. Very nice Butterflies_dont_cry, but a smile on your face, not a tear. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Butterflies ... such powerful and raw emotions. I ached just reading this verse. Beautifully written from the sorrows of the heart. Best wishes and HUGS, /Kit |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
butterfly: I can relate almost too well to this poem...it brought back feelings that left from me not so long ago. I guess you never really forget. Thanks for sharing yours. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* Inside is the one place that no one can hurt you.....of course that means no one can help you either. As for the cry...sure thing. It's quiet comfort when someone understands...I appreciate it~ Brian* Awe...my thanks to you. A hug of the heart is well received as well...I think my muse was having a bad day...tripping down memory lane. Thank you for your kindness and your gentle heart~ Walt* many to yuh thanks Janet* I'm beginning to think that is the ONLY way I get it! As for wise.....after all the tears I should be a millionaire call Regis quick!!! Sunny* Thank you for reading and for you kind comments, they are always appreciated~ Bill* Thanks for the hug.....the smile will come..it always does after the rain Kit* You are always a ray of sunshine! Thank you so much for reading~ PS* No I don't think you ever forget pain that deep....you can tuck it away..but not forget. Thank you for reading...so sorry that you relate to this~ [This message has been edited by Butterflies_dont_cry (edited 07-20-2000).] |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, Ouch, I can feel the knife. Powerful words my friend. What images. Great writing. Take care. **HUGS** LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ You touch me with your thoughts. I hope all of our *hugs* touch you. Seems to me that a heart as loving as yours deserves more ... just more. Love you ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Jaysun C Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 56 |
B_D_C - L_O_L that damn knife seams to find its way into too many of our lives mine was old and rusty and left a big ol scar your words speak the feelings i wish i never felt though as i read them my heart will still melt ); than you |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Beautiful sweet butterflies even though it was sad but hey I don't believe for one minute your heart would ever turn to stone well at least I would hope not Love Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
OOooohhhhhh, I wish there were words to take away this pain, but you are not alone in here............ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
My dear friend! This is awesome writing, powerful, painful, emotive, and straight from the heart as always. By hanging onto the memories you have learned the lessons and become stronger and wiser. You know my shoulder is always available, take care! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Looks like some lingering pain has stopped by for a little visit...I believe that we do learn lessons from our mistakes or our pain...in my case I realize that I need to be more dedicated and devoted when I am actively in a relationship...embrace it and value it...when its gone its too late..James |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
L.W.* I will if you will ((AW hugs))~Marge* I'm not sure if I deserve more but I all the hugs are well received and felt from the heart~ Jaysun* Welcome to Passions! Sorry for the pain and the scar...I hope healing comes soon. Tracie* Sometimes I wish it would..lol but it keeps hurting to let me know it's very much alive. **AW hugs** sweet girl! Michael G* I'm sure I'm not...my heart goes out to those that feel it too. Eagle* I know.....it should be soggy by now...lol James* The advice from someone who knows all to well I see......thank you. To All of you* Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the kindness and the hugs....how could I ever STAY sad with all of you |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Don't be sad BDC....not like your usual writing but I still liked it.....great work!!! Julie :) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Remembrance my eternal spark I know this! You've written with a dreary pen m'friend. Inky dark and full of the poignant emotions that we've all known even if we weren't able to express them! You've done it magnificently here... and I really liked your usage of ellipsis' to segregate in the lines!  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Julie* As always your kindness is appreciated Christopher* Dark enough for you Thank's S.C.'s |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I feel this deep |
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