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DestinysCharm
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0 posted 2000-07-20 06:12 PM


Cradle of Desire (Sven's Challenge)

Melody of my heart, song of my life...
One day a dream of becoming his wife.
Cradle of desire, rocks in motion...
Breath of the moment, sighs with emotion.
Mind plays happily within his castle...
Distance of hearts, creates only hassle.
Capturing imagined voice upon cloud...
Sensually soft, yet caressingly loud.
Realm of love, illustrated creation...
Carries beyond a world of sedation.




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brian madden
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1 posted 2000-07-20 06:17 PM


DC, wow a really beautiful piece, I have not seen the challenge but I can tell that you have excelled the brief with this wonderful piece.

why must we pray
screaming? why must not death be redefined? we shut our eyes we stretch out our arms and whirl on a pane of glass-patti smith

linda munday
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2 posted 2000-07-20 10:41 PM


Wow, Destiny,
You have crafted a lovely poem here.
Where did you get the first line from, it's excellent!
LOL - I'm kidding around, I was just in the poetry challenge section and I know what the challenge was.
Good to see you met the challenge so well.
Linda M  

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3 posted 2000-07-21 12:49 PM


I am simply amazed DC. . . you have created a small masterpiece here. . . simply wonderful. . . just wonderful. . .

Excellent. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


DestinysCharm
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4 posted 2000-07-21 08:33 AM


brian, Thanks so much for your inspiring words, I appreciate.

linda, Thank you, glad you enjoyed. I had fun with this challenge.

Sven, Thanks for your wonderful compliments, I'm not sure I would call it a masterpiece myself, but I appreciate your vote of confidence.
Thank you for the challenge it was a joy.

kaile
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5 posted 2000-07-21 12:54 PM


Gosh,if you dont consider this a masterpiece....then the poems that you consider masterpieces will be truly awesome...hmmm...

enjoyed this read muchly...wonderful imagery within each line....and this poem rhymes so well....two ingredients that i will like to see in my own poetry more often(Sigh)

well done

Munda
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6 posted 2000-07-21 06:05 PM


Beautiful poem DC ! I'm impressed !
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