Open Poetry #8 |
Autum leaf....clinging |
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
I'm like that last Autumn leaf clinging to the branch like my life depends upon it Swaying in the bitter cold wind still clinging to the highest branch The cold wind trying hard to make me fall but I hold on for dear life .....so hard, I try Then finally I give in The cold wind has won I let go with a gentle longing .....and I cry Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Tracie, This is so sad... To me the branch was like the last hope against the enemy - the cold autumn wind... but you shouldn't give up hope for there is always a way out... at the end of the darkest tunnels, there would be but a ray of light flickering waiting for you to reach and then it will be bliss... regards, sudhir P.S are you reading Robert Frost these days? just curious Death, be not proud, though some have called thee, Mighty and dreadful, for thou art not so; - John Donne |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sudhir~ I know this is so sad..I wrote this while waiting to pick my daughter up from school yesterday, it was a very cold wintery day and along the street the road was filled with trees losing those last autumn leaves, while watching one leaf just clinging by itself to the branch this is what I wrote So glad you liked it sudhir and thanks for your comforting thoughts. Thanks friend Love Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I know this picture you've painted so well Tracie ... I've felt the same way when watching. You captured it beautifully! Best wishes, /Kit |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
a perfect picture in few words, tracie66 ... nice. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Kit~ Thanks hon..I wasn't sad so I thought but on this day I felt a little depressed and this was what I wrote...must have been the weather, blame it on the weather Tracie~ MA~ Thanks for your comments I appreciate it Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sad as it may be it is also a beautiful write. The imagery was perfect. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tracie... beautiful imagery.. such strong well expressed emotions its 98 here and your in winter there aint the world a hoot later-chilly-willy-gator jm |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Mark~ Thanks Mark for your lovely comments Tracie~ Janny~ Brrrr it's so cold here at the moment and I also lived in one of coldest States in Australia but it is a beautiful place so I can't complain really. Thanks for your great comments See ya Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Tracie very touching...enjoyed the comparison to the last Autumn leaf...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Extremely well painted picture Tracie. I fell right into it and could'nt escape...... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Nice thoughts Tracie ... like the determined ant ... that tries to build his home on the sea shore ... sometimes we have to go with the flow |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
James, ethome & Rex thanks so much to all for reading and replying. Rex you're so right we do sometimes have to just go where the wind takes us Thanks Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Tracie~ What a compelling piece. I've done that same thing when caught in the awe of seeing the last leaf on the tree hanging on with tenacity. Also have been caught in a moment of splendor in seeing the first leaf of spring emerge as if to say ... 'here I am !' I wish you warmth on the rays of the sun. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Well I just have to say It's just a little bit to much like something my wife wrote back in forum #7 called "Last leaf Clinging" Last leaf clinging gazing from dry yellow eyes at the river below; swaying slowly on old brittle bones; devouring one more hungry glance before the snow. Releasing its passionate clutch on the branch, it sails in to the wind’s buoyant face and gently tucks in softly to the laced rich earth’s embrace. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Marge~ Thanks hon for your warmth I need it because it is sooo cold here...thanks You wouldn't believe what I look like sitting here I've got the fire going the dressing gown on, slippers and a ...yes wait for it...a beanie on my head Oh what a sight anyway at least I'm warm Love Tracie~ Hello buddy Where U been well thanks for replying with such kindness and that poem is soo beautiful...thanks. I missed it the first time so I'm glad you gave me a peek see ya buddy o mine Tracie~< !signature--> Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 07-25-2000).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Tracie66, You certainly are sending one powerful message. Very well written, with sadness. |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
this is so sad. at least spring is just around the corner, huh? Tony |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Tracie, Wonderful writing my friend. I can see that solitary leaf hanging on for life to the tree. Great images that come to mind while reading this. Hope that fire has warmed you up!! Hard to believe it is winter somewhere right now!!! Take care, LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Bill, Tony and LW sorry I have taken a while to reply. I have been busy because my sister had a beautiful little baby boy on the 25th. Thanks to all for your lovely comments and yep it is winter and cold but hey who's complaining Love to all Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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