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Crystalled Light Tumbles (my first Haiku attempt)
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Crystalled Light Tumbles (my first Haiku attempt) |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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5-7-5 < !signature-->Crystalled light tumbles Falling upon Neptune's gleam Touching hallowed tides. *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 07-12-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh what a beautiful picture you have penned my dear. it is Magnificent!!! Woohooo Love it  Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Silkdragon Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 65 |
Krista, this was really cool! It's so short, but it doesn't have to be long to be beautiful. I found it really impressive. hmmm... maybe there should be more short poems written. All the imagery and imagination you need is right there. Great job! Luv, Erin |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
That is truly wonderful... Sauni |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I can't believe it's your first Haiku! You did a great job! Lovely imagery!  |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Very Very Good. love the hallowed tides Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
With only three short lines and 17 syllables you still manage to create an evocative image! Quite the work, my love Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This is so beautiful...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Alwye, Couldn't have done it better myself. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Who needs imagination with a poet like you? Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I love the sea... this was beautiful *sigh* and so peaceful ~H |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Wow Krissa! What a beautiful poem! Yay for Haikus! "The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Elizabeth
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well, you sound like you've been doing these all your life! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Simply stunning! You're so talented Krista! It's hard to believe that this is your first ever haiku! Congratulations! Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, you've made this look too easy Krista! I've not tried one myself in years ... beautifully written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all so much! *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Marvellous! Imagery! |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is beautiful, Krista. I envy anyone who can write a haiku or anything similar. I have to babble on and on and on and on and on and on and on and on and on and on and on to get my point across...  "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Excellent! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You know - somehow I think you're golden at anything and everything you set out out to do. Wonderfully done, Krista. Michael |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
well,you look like you have been writing haiku all your life...lovely first attempt |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Christopher- Thank you much, my friend! LoveBug- LOL, I'm a rambler myself...which made this pretty hard at first...give it a try, I bet you could do a great job! EagleOne- Thanks! Michael- It's wonderful to hear from you again, my friend. I truly and deeply appreciate your kindness. kaile- Thank you! *Krista Knutson* "We are not seperate from spirit, we are in it." ~Plotinus~ |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
up to the top to make others smile just as I did. |
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