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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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"CRUSHED" My passions are silent, My heart is gone. Why dear Lord, Have I done her so wrong? My eyes not only no longer glisten, They are wet with many tears too. My thoughts feel so empty, Hollow and barren, what to do? Promises made but broken, Kisses in the night that flew away. I never thought I would see her go, Now she won't ever be back, for even one day. The darkness of the night, Hides your eyes from me. The flames of passion that were there, I know has died within thee. Sweet, sweet sorrow, Crying, and forlorn. My soul slowly dying, Will I ever be reborn? Now that she's gone, And boarded that train. I watched it pull out of the station, And I was left in so much pain. A love that was found, Found, but was not certain. Bye my "Baby", We've closed that final curtain. Bill Charles |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Releasing a love is so difficult... you've expressed this very well here. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Meadowmuse, Thank you for reading this poem and for your kind reply. |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Such sadness and pain...I liked this!!!! ~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Beth, Thank you for your comments. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
"sweet, sweet sorrow, crying and forlorn. my soul slowly dying, will i ever be reborn?" ------------------------------- oh you shall be reborn, but will carry this lost love as a bittersweet lesson of life... this poem was so tender, i can feel the aching.........very well done! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This poem is so soft and tender...it touches my heart...James |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Bill..... You can write anything and it just comes to life for me! This is sad, but it's a reality for most of us, and I love the way you wrote it. Never, ever stop writing.... ~~~~~Live for Today~~~~~ taste every single moment |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This feels as though it was written with tears.....such sorrow. You dove deeply for the words and it wove itself into a beautiful touching piece~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
jmlee12345, Thank you very much for your gracious words. They are deeply appreciated. Sunny1, Thank you Sunny, I never tire of reading your writings, and reading your responses to mine. The only thing is, I am always in wait for your next posting. And I hope to continue writing until my breath is taken away. Thank you again. Butterflies_dont_cry, A tear fell from one eye, and sorrow was there. Thank you for the reply, and for reading this writing. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Poutprincess, Oh my, I am so sorry that I didn't reply to your wonderful comments about this poem. I humbly apologize, with no excuses. Thank you Princess for all the kind words. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Your sorrow is felt deeply in this sad piece...great writing Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Bill I am so glad you've come along to post here. It is a joy to try and read your heart through these great lines. I found this to be a very tender but sad composition. I enjoyed it thoroughly......take care.....ethome.... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Humm, I see good things to come, as you have found Passions to be the home that it is! Look forward to more... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
tracie66, Yes, sorrow is felt, but out there is the dawn of a new day. Thank you tracie66, for your comments. ethome, I am also very happy to be here at Passions. What a place to meet some of the most kind and wholesome people I have ever met. I could stay and write 24 hours a day, but I must work so that I can at least eat once in awhile. Thank you for your comments. Sunshine, Oh yes, a home I have found and will be here, as long as these fingers can touch a keyboard. A place that I can express my emotions through poetry, and where others can stop by for a read. Thank you so much for your comments. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bill~ Touching goodbye is sometimes fraught with sorrow ... but then ..... tomorrow ! 'Sweet, sweet sorrow, Crying, and forlorn. My soul slowly dying, Will I ever be reborn?' Yes, rebirth comes on the soft sigh of a new love that steps off the next train. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Marge, Your most gracious comments are always looked forward too. Thank you so much for taking the time to read this writing of sorrow that I have done. |
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