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The Feel of Her Feel ... |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
THE FEEL OF HER FEEL ... The feel of her feel between my lips described in time as rose petals in bloom Flowering silken softness no one will deny the rose comes close, but not in waves A season's growth in rich rooted soil spreads fragrant buds on pallet's palate But her feel perfumes upon my tender touch with shoots so thick of heaven's breath Vining fingers upon trellised brace narrow openings in narrower space But a warm familiar path to her feel opens to me upon my gentle kiss Thorn's harsh secret tells only to protect pricking thieves of beauty's scarlet prize But passion's alluring voice wears no thorns my painless trek to hear her feel, softly speak As tending a garden of roses turns to life's work still life rewards of splendor and grace fill my vase Yet a dozen's dozen compares not to her one the feel of her feel comes crashing upon my lips M.A. Miller 07.19.00 < !signature--> My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A.M. [This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 07-19-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The feel of her feel between my lips described in time as rose petals in bloom flowering silken softness no one will deny the rose comes close, but not in waves ===================== As tending a garden of roses turns to life's work still rewards of splendor and grace fill my vase yet a dozen's dozen compares not to her one the feel of her feel comes crashing upon my lips ================= oh man... I FELT this poem... exceptional writing here Mark, the imagery is superb... the vocabulary and metaphors are perfect and the emotions laced with sensuality are enchanting... wonderful creative poetic work here... jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
thanks jm ... reworked the line placement a little and "feel" it works better now ... thanks again for reading ... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Marvelous structure and rhyme scheme, excellent lines........ "But passions alluring voice wears no thorns." Oh I that's the truth alright....Great one M.A. Love this one! |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
thanks ethome ... enjoying your work as well ... read/write on ... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ah...me likes, Mr. Miller, and I'm quite certain Mrs. Miller does too...lol...very very sensual... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Mark* This is indeed an excellent, the imagery was wonderful, thank you for sharing this piece~ |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
thanks serenity and bdc ... needless to say, my wife and i exchanged gifts (wink, wink) the night before this was written ... how's that for an inuendo, serenity? ... thanks again. [This message has been edited by MA Miller (edited 07-20-2000).] |
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