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Moon Sail Away
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Moon Sail Away |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Moon Sail Away A celestial glow disturbed the room and in its fade a shadow bloomed as if this light took up some space and beguiled the air with an embrace so I crossed the bedroom’s gloom into the refracted space of moon that grazed the sky in watchful glean and took me to a peaceful dream leaving behind the wilted pillow and moving over the silver willow just a beam of purest pale leaning into dreams a sail then serene in the between to flow with gilded butterfly wing with dust of wishes made today across the trail of milky way Would that I could stay this flight and be a follower of this light though robin song would gather dust against the bushes in cobwebs thrust and my dear heart who still sleeps on would reach out and find me gone so I choose the breaking day and the moon sailing away away the moon sailing away |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I'm reminded of an oldie that my grandfather used to sing to me. 'Sail along silvery moon on Moonlight Bay ... We could hear the voices ringing they seem to say You have stolen my heart now don't go 'way As we sang those old sweet songs on Moonlight Bay.' It is a lovely thing you've done to the moon, my dear. What a pleasure to share the moon with someone so dear to my heart. Thank you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Martie, now a moon massage....lol...I thank you...and it is beautiful, ain't it? You've served her well, just simply sweetly awesome. Like the moon. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
then serene in the between to flow with gilded butterfly wing with dust of wishes made today across the trail of milky way Would that I could stay this flight and be a follower of this light though robin song would gather dust against the bushes in cobwebs thrust and my dear heart who still sleeps on would reach out and find me gone so I choose the breaking day and the moon sailing away away the moon sailing away ================= OH MAN.... MARTIE RHYMED!!!!!!!!! and its AWESOME... moonbeams and martie rhymes... what more could I ask for  so very lovely my dear... and one of two times I remember reading a rhyme from you... you wear it well... later-cadence-gator jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
this is breathtaking...i thank you for moving my heart with such a divine tribute to the moons beauty. |
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gem Junior Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 39 |
You are such an eloquent writer.I loved this one! From beginning to end it's seemless! Gem |
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gem Junior Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 39 |
Seamless! That's more like it! Gem |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I have to agree with jm...your rhyme threw me at first and I had to check to make sure I was reading your poem. This another amazing work from you and the rhyme and the moon look perfect together; and to think that we share the same moon.  [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 07-19-2000).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
. You only need a dot now...hehehe...to let you know how I feel about your poetry hon... K |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
then serene in the between to flow with gilded butterfly wing with dust of wishes made today across the trail of milky way a very beautiful description, Martie I am enjoying reading the many wonderful poets here. ~~softly Maureen *and the moon is very special to me |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Soft and tender like the breeze beneath the moon. A beautiful piece Martie~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie, this is lovely, emotive poetry. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge---there are so many songs about the moon...maybe we could sing them together some day. Serenity--thank you for your simply, sweetly awesome reply! Janet--thanks for noticing the rhyme..not comfortable with it really, but for some reason, last night the moon rhymed. poutprincess-I'm so glad this poem moved you, thank you for telling me. gem--thanks for seemless and seamless, too funny! Mark--fun to think that same moon is rhyming down on so many, I'm glad you are one of them. Kamla--you are a dot....or two...or three of breathless! Maureen--thank you for including this poem in your reading and taking the time to comment. Butterflies--thankyou for the soft and tender breeze under the moon-tis a lovely thought. Claire--I appreciate your comments always...and I'm so glad to see you! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Martie, a really beautiful poem. LOvely the plot of our life sweats in the dark like a face the mystery of childbirth, of childhood itself grave visitations what is it that calls to us?" patti smith [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 07-19-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely - like a whispering song in dreams. Corinne |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Brian and Corinne..thank you so much for reading and enjoying the moonlight with me. |
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